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dedicated 11-22-2009 09:44 AM

my first song post
 
The genre of the music I write is 80s rock. Hair metal, heavy metal, etc. Just so you know.
Here is what it will be like once I start writing the music to it.



[Slow, quiet guitar intro]

I know you're scared
Cause you can't bear
The pain of being who you are

Well heres what I say
See it my way
It could be worse, be glad you're not me

[explosion of guitars, music gets fast]

You could be me
Lost in a world full of jumbled colors
Then you'll see
Whats real is bad, whats good is dream

Please don't come inside
I'll infect you
It won't be your fault
Its spreading like a wildfire, theres nothing you can do

[interlude]

You could be me
Screaming at the world, but you're never heard
Then you'll see
You were put on this earth to fight this fight alone

Please don't come inside
I'll infect you
It won't be your fault
This mess is spreading like a fire, theres nothing you can do

alltimelow 12-24-2009 07:40 PM

Sounds, good :)

duncan 12-29-2009 05:36 AM

You post only the lyrics how about the chords ...

Lisa Nicole 12-30-2009 06:43 PM

it would be nice to hear the sad music that goes with such sad lyrics.

Mick 12-30-2009 11:28 PM

Pretty good lyrics, not as corny as some.

samezoobi 12-30-2009 11:52 PM

Hello.
According to me, This is best Lyrics because each word has own meaning and I like so much this type of song. I like sad song and This is my one of the favourite.
Thanks for posting.

dedicated 02-19-2010 07:31 PM

hey all, sorry it took me this long to back to you guys. I haven't been on for a while.
Since then I've made some modifications to the lyrics. They're fixed below. Also I've written music. Is there a way I could put an audio file on here of the music?


[Slow, quiet guitar intro]

I know you're scared
Cause you can't bear
The pain of being who you are

Well heres what I say
See it my way
It could be worse, be glad you're not me

[explosion of guitars, music gets fast]

You could be me
Dumped in a world full of jumbled colors
Then you'll see
Whats real is bad, whats good is dream

Please don't come inside
I'll infect you
It won't be your fault
This mess is spreading like a fire, theres nothing you can do

You could be me
Screaming at the world, but you're never heard
Then you'll see
You were put on this earth to fight this fight alone

Please don't come inside
I'll infect you
It won't be your fault
The plague is coming for you all, there's nothing you can do

You could be me
Threatened by nothing and fading fast
Then you'll see
You've gotta give up, there's no point if you win

Please don't come inside
I'll infect you
It won't be your fault
The fires burning through heart, theres nothing you can do
It's been coming from the start, theres nothing you can do
Prepare your soul to be torn apart, theres nothing you can do

t3hplatyz0rz 02-19-2010 09:08 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by dedicated (Post 828750)
hey all, sorry it took me this long to back to you guys. I haven't been on for a while.
Since then I've made some modifications to the lyrics. They're fixed below. Also I've written music. Is there a way I could put an audio file on here of the music?

Do you have 15 posts???
If you do, you can put a link. But, if this is the only thing you do on this site, you might get accused of advertising and get b&.
Quote:

Originally Posted by dedicated (Post 828750)
[Slow, quiet guitar intro]

I know you're scared
Cause you can't bear
The pain of being who you are

Well heres what I say
See it my way
It could be worse, be glad you're not me

[explosion of guitars, music gets fast]

If I make a new band sometime soon, "Explosion of Guitars" is going to be a consideration for their name. Especially if it's got no guitars. That would be cool.

Quote:

Originally Posted by dedicated (Post 828750)
You could be me
Dumped in a world full of jumbled colors
Then you'll see
Whats real is bad, whats good is dream

Please don't come inside
I'll infect you
It won't be your fault
This mess is spreading like a fire, theres nothing you can do

You could be me
Screaming at the world, but you're never heard
Then you'll see
You were put on this earth to fight this fight alone

Please don't come inside
I'll infect you
It won't be your fault
The plague is coming for you all, there's nothing you can do

You could be me
Threatened by nothing and fading fast
Then you'll see
You've gotta give up, there's no point if you win

Please don't come inside
I'll infect you
It won't be your fault
The fires burning through heart, theres nothing you can do
It's been coming from the start, theres nothing you can do
Prepare your soul to be torn apart, theres nothing you can do

lol there are so many new users posting on your thread...

I think that this has it's good points and it's bad points. The good points are the concept, and the originality. Lots of people think this, I think everybody, but nobody says it, at least no songs I can think of off the top of my head. The bad points are probably that it's got not enough detail. I think that this is probably my number one pork with modern poetry. I don't know anything about this person except that they are full of self pity. It's not the end of the world, and I don't think it's big enough to warrant an edit, but it's something to think about.


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