This Poem Is Probably Going To Go Over Your Head..
 

but here goes. it's lyrics for an experimental song i'm writing. it's called 'Do fish dream?'
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My friend is a fish
he lives in my room.
his fin is a cloud.
he sees me when I sleep

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Is this a poem or is it a riddle?

people are going to think you're singing about this

http://4.bp.blogspot.com/_F2wMsozqNI...us-fish_01.jpg

then they would be wrong

I think the song is about tennis.

wrong or not it's the audience and not the artist that determines what creations are really about.

I understand that, but you must be some jesus freak if the only thing you got from the lyrics was jesus

So what is it about?

I wrote it about my pet fish named carl

hehe That's deep.


Is there more to it?

I thought of Jesus as well.

Does he play tennis?

Well the name Carl does mean "lord".

You guys are too deep for me. I just thought of a fish.

so... why try to make it seem deep in the first place if it's meant to be plainly descriptive?

Why is his fin a cloud?

stop using confining/reductive terms to describe my lyrics. it's not meant to be deep or plainly descriptive. it just is. its obvious you and me are in two different universes and will never be on the same wavelength about anything.

why does a pin drop like a pungent odor?

Reaganomics?

i smell communism! lol jk

Because he lives in Heaven, therefore he is Jesus.

Or... he has a cloud fin because being a fish he needs a supply of water when he goes off on land-based expeditions. It's basically the fish equivalent of a diver's oxygen tank.

Anyway he can't be Jesus because that would mean he walked on water and if he did that he wouldn't be able to breathe.

woah i guess im all the other people who thought of Jesus lol

it didnt get me at the fish, it got me at the cloud stuff

I didn't think "fish" or "jesus." I just thought "shit."




OHSNAP.

But, based on your theory, if his fin is a cloud then he could breathe outside of the water.

Damn, you're right!

I try :)

that's cool. maybe system of a down or simple plan is more your style

^Best poem about tennis ever.

Tennis?
I THOUGHT THIS WAS COOKING CLASS.

get used to it, especially if you plan on continuing to misrepresent yourself in the future.

so if you're writing about a fish, and it's about a fish, how is it not plainly descriptive?

and if you're presenting it as something that will probably go over most people's heads how is it not a pretentious attempt at seeming deep when you had already determined that you were writing a clear and direct description?

I'll post this again since your brain has trouble processing this. I'll even bold it

it just is. its obvious you and me are in two different universes and will never be on the same wavelength about anything.

i don't have any hassle processing the fact that you're trying to back peddle and avoid my simple questions.

here's a pro-tip for the next forum you join: don't assume all the members are morons.

My friend is a fish
he lives in my room.
his fin is a cloud.
he sees me when I sleep

hmmmmm,
I was going to reply with what i can a courtesy reply to this. But after seeing some of the snide comments you have made to other people on here. You start off saying this poem will go over your head. How do you figure a four line stanza is suppose to go over peoples head. It can be done with only four lines. But you'll have to get a stronger set of metaphors then what you have. Why do you only have four lines also? Why not write more lines to this poems. You make it sound like you're trying to get all deep on us. I'll be honest and say this isn't even poetry and more like paint by numbers that got the colors mixed up. In other words i find this juvenile and you need to try to work on it more.
thanks
the iron man

Correct.
In your universe, you're awful at writing poetry.
In ours, we realize it.

clean up on aisle BOOM.

It is. We're making fish tonight.

Trust me youre better off throwing the fish on the bank its to bony to get any decent meat from it

hahahaha!

And what else?