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Old 03-07-2010, 04:26 PM   #11 (permalink)
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It sounds quite a bit like the other ones. Very, very, well produced. Singer seems to be straining a bit at parts, especially around 1:23.
As for the lyrics, I was actually just feeling the same thing. I don't think I like who I was. I love who I will be.
I think this is a universal sentiment which is not often expressed. I noticed you used the stringed instrument at the end again. I think that that's interesting, that you did the same thing twice.
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Old 03-08-2010, 02:52 PM   #12 (permalink)
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Well produced? LoL, I did it all on my laptop well, I try to write lyrics based on personal experiences, because that makes them somewhat better, although I am not that good of a lyricist to begin with. Also I am a string freak, I use (and overuse) strings in almost all of my songs
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Old 03-08-2010, 03:21 PM   #13 (permalink)
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Well produced? LoL, I did it all on my laptop.
You should hear what I do on my laptop, or maybe you shouldn't. It sounds like **** compared to this.
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Old 03-08-2010, 03:57 PM   #14 (permalink)
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practice, I guess, lol
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Old 12-16-2010, 05:57 PM   #15 (permalink)
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If anyone is interested, I would really like some opinions. This is a song that I made with a program that generates artificial voice. It sounds kind of fake, but it's the only thing I have now but I hope I will soon find time to record it with a real vocalist.



here are the lyrics (not my best work, but I think that I have managed to describe how I feel right now)

Wrong

So it hurts,
But it’s not the first time that I feel this
I’ve been wrong so many times.
Once again
I am leaving everything behind me
But I know that I’ll be back.

Why am I on this crossroad?
Why can nobody point my way?

I was wrong again as I always am
And I know I’ll be wrong once more.
I can’t see the sun, I am used to that
I know I’ll get lost, and it hurts.

This is not what I wanted.
How did I deserve it?
Why can’t I be someone else?
Look at me
I am standing right where you can see me
Can you help me? I am lost.

Why am I on this crossroad?
Why can nobody point my way?

I was wrong again as I always am
And I know I’ll be wrong once more.
I can’t see the sun, I am used to that
I know I’ll get lost, and it hurts.

Maybe this time...
Maybe this time...
Maybe this time...
I’ll be right...

Why am I on this crossroad?
Why can nobody point my way?

I was wrong again as I always am
And I know I’ll be wrong once more.
I can’t see the sun, I am used to that
I know I’ll get lost, and it hurts.
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Old 12-21-2010, 09:51 PM   #16 (permalink)
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i like the lyrics. it's a nice positive song. notation wise the music didn't feel as uplifting as the lyrics would imply. but that's not necessarily a bad thing, contrast can be a great thing.

i like the construction of the song too.

the only caveat i have is: regarding the singer, it didn't feel right notation wise in the part

If you smile at life
No one has to know how much you need to smile at all
Walk forward and smile
Don’t forget what you’re smiling for
And don’t forget to smile at all
Look into the sky and smile…

Like it was kind of pitchy here. which can make a good song turn amateur sounding super fast. For my taste, she has a nice voice but it comes off kind of monotone rather than expressive. emotionless. obviously sometimes singers go for that and if that's the case here, she succeeded. just a personal preference on my part so i'm by no means saying it's "wrong."

the break was nice too. i can tell you're a song writing student, awesome

Nice job
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Old 12-28-2010, 10:58 AM   #17 (permalink)
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Good job, good job. The artificial voice is nice for me. What kind of program you used to generate this artificial voice?
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Old 12-29-2010, 04:31 AM   #18 (permalink)
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Good job, good job. The artificial voice is nice for me. What kind of program you used to generate this artificial voice?
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Old 12-31-2010, 11:13 AM   #19 (permalink)
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Happy New Year!
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Old 03-07-2011, 06:52 AM   #20 (permalink)
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Running
Close the door and sit. Why are you hiding?
Are the windows shut? ‘Cause they are coming.
There’s no need to hide. They’re gonna find you.
When the mirrors break that’s when they’ll get you.


Why do you try to deny them?
Why do you try to escape them?
There is no reason to fight them.
You only need to embrace them.

Run away from your memories.
Just run away from me.
Run away! I will never leave you
I will find you. I am your worst memory.

Lay beside me and let’s dream together.
Hold my hand while I try to remember
Let me close my eyes and rest while you’re here
When I fall asleep, you’ll try to leave me.

Why do you try to deny them?
Why do you try to escape them?
There is no reason to fight them.
You only need to embrace them.

Run away from your memories.
Just run away from me.
Run away! I will never leave you
I will find you.

Your memories will never be gone.
Don’t try to run, don’t try to hide
Cause they still can find you
I know you well
I know you will keep running
And you will keep hiding anyway

Run away from your memories.
Just run away from me.
Run away! I will never leave you
I will find you. I am your worst memory.
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