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Old 04-13-2010, 04:55 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Hey I'm currently writing and recording a new song each week for a year, started on the 1st Jan. Here's this weeks:

Why Aren't You Happy
Why aren't you happy?
Aren't you happy anymore?
You used to be so understanding
But now these dragons are just falling on the floor

It seems you seem to care about
These things you never cared about
You never seemed to care about before

Do you remember?
When everybody used to call you by your name?
Right before your anger
Started to manifest itself into your pain

We drove to hospital
We ran the last few yards
Whilst you complained of pins and needles in your arm

You can have a listen to the song itself at www.Aidy.com it's in the 'Song A Week' section :-)

Last edited by Aidy; 04-13-2010 at 06:46 AM. Reason: Adding link for the song
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Old 04-13-2010, 05:42 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Interesting idea. I would definetly do it too if I had the space/time.

I listened to it on your website and I absolutely loved this song, by the way.
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Old 04-16-2010, 03:39 AM   #3 (permalink)
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Cheers for a feedback Conan :-) here's this weeks song:

Stupidity
This is the end of progress
This is the end of you
This is the end of everything that came to be, was true
Hello stupidity, my best friend
How have you been?
I didn't think I'd see you here again
But as the wheels touched down, you set me on the ground
And left me on the runway once again
I tried to walk away this time
I didn't know you'd wanna fly
I was left alone here to pretend

Early stands in 73
I know how hard the jail can be
The towers fell in total sympathy
You're self obsessed, sarcastic, though your heart's enthusiastic
I don't think I like you anymore
Suicide seemed too extreme
Makes you want to be like me
I don't think I like you anymore

Hello stupidity my friend
You left me on the runway once again

Once again you can download the track from Aidy.com in the Song A Week section.
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Old 04-22-2010, 06:19 PM   #4 (permalink)
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Default Not Your Day

Well there's a monkey in my pocket
And he's biting chunks off me
And along with this commotion
There's bullets raining down on me

But I'll go through all the motions
If you pay me twice the price
It's all about the money man so hey
It's just not your day

Well I know this girl called Jenny
And she's waiting there for me
She's tied up in a back room
And they torture her for me

Check out the recording here
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Old 05-07-2010, 04:52 PM   #5 (permalink)
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Post Killing God

It won't be long
We're nearly half way there
Walk like an animal
To hold an animal's stare
Thinking it thru
We'll turn it all around
You do it right
It won't make a sound

Oh, what's that?
Did your morals come flying back?
I can't do it

Carrying on
We're going two by two
Into a cloud on the outskirts
We're doing fine by you
Guns in the back
I never felt this way
Tamboring logic and genius
Lost in the haze

Listen to it here
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Old 05-07-2010, 05:30 PM   #6 (permalink)
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Hi Aidy,

I listened to these four songs of yours and enjoyed them! You're already on week 19, I see, and keeping your pace up, or perhaps I should say just focusing your usual creative output into these music releases. It's nice you offer them for free.

I listened to "Not Your Day" first because I was curious about the monkey in the pocket biting chunks off you. Your lyrics tend to be rather surrealistic, I think, although "Why aren't you happy" makes sense to me. I like the sound of your songs, but agree with what you wrote about the songs: "The more I do this project, the less I seem to actually understand what my songs are about." That amused me, but I also felt the same listening to the songs.

I think if some of your lyrics made more sense (to me) then your songs would work even better, because the meaning of the words and the sound of the songs would work synergistically together. I listen to the songs and enjoy them, but when they are done I think, what was that all about? So my mind isn't fully satisfied.

My favorite of these four is "Killing God," since I like the line that sounds sarcastic to me: "Oh, what's that? Did your morals come flying back?"--and I like the sound of the song very much, especially the instrumental section with distortion in the middle of the piece.

I just wish I understood more of the song. Even when I cast through my mind for metaphorical interpretations of some of the lines in "Killing God," I end up with a blank, though I can come up with some ideas.

For example, maybe the second verse that begins, "Carrying on," means people just live their lives without introspection. Then you use a Biblical Noah's ark reference, perhaps to suggest people just do what they feel they need to do, which the gun in the back could represent, but that you (the singer) never felt content with this. Then I don't know what the word "tamboring" means so I get confused.

I still enjoyed the songs very much and plan to listen to more. Like Conan said, your project is an interesting one. You must be having a lot of fun doing this!
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Hey Vegangelica,
Thanks for taking the time to listen and give me all that feedback!

That word you asked about, I think you may be referring to the phrase 'tamborine logic' it just came out of mouth, and I really liked the way it sounded in the sentence, so I left it in there, I almost start to make senseof the songs after I've written them.

I'm combining a lot of scratch lyrics with some literal stuff, which is making the songs more abstract and sometimes it's easier to write about personal things in a more abstract manner.

Though if the meaning to anything in particular is bugging you then feel free to ask, and I'll do my best to explain any weirdness. Either on here, or drop me an email via my site.

Thanks again :-)
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Thought I'd have a go at writing a happy song that makes some kind of logical sense, as a song writing exercise, and I came up with the possibly bland notion of someone walking home from work and enjoying the experience so much he "smiles" I'm not that enamoured with this one, but here you go:

SMILE
I smile
For the 3 mile
Walk home everyday, half five, sun or rain
I smile

There's happiness in solitude
I'm walking all alone
I'm walking out the office and I'm switching off my phone
If anybody wants me they can get me when I'm home
But for fifteen little minutes I just want to be alone

The sun is always shining
In the corner of my mind
Past dilapidated buildings, they're collapsing over time
Another boring work day, where I'm treated so unfair
But for fifteen little minutes, I just don't care

I'm walking over crossings
And I'm turning at the lights
Walking down the high street, where I spend my drunken nights
I start to reminisce, when I was 16
I came here every weekend with a fake id

You can listen to it here
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Old 05-23-2010, 05:22 AM   #9 (permalink)
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I couldn't open up the song on my computer without changing security settings, Aidy, so I'll wait to listen until I get on another computer.

I thought the lyrics were cute because they *are* describing something so simple and commonplace. I like the way the lyrics end with the fake id memory. Including that little bit of personal trivia amused me and makes the song sound even more real. Also, I like the image of the dilapidated buildings.

Wait. A 3 mile walk. Doesn't that take an hour?! That's a pretty long walk if the person goes to and from work on foot, an hour one way. Maybe the person carpools to get to work, and so just has to walk home. "High street" sounds so...so...Cambridge. Your walks there are definitely more pleasant than my city walks, I bet.
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After I wrote it I did actually realise that 3 miles should take longer to walk, but then thought "oh well, no one'll" notice. How wrong I was ;-)

Cambridge is a great city to walk thru, although I drive to work.
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