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Old 04-16-2010, 02:57 AM   #1 (permalink)
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where you are...

I dig my way through to where you are
We're falling down
But from you, not a sound
I have to believe if we made it this far
We'll make it further.
find warmth in winter

I'm fighting flames to get where you are
I cannot see
But i can see you
And proudly i will wear these scars
Until you're near
until you heal me

I remember lying in your arms
You spoke my name with such sincerity
It was a dream too good to be true
I've fallen down straight into you
One kiss from you And all my thoughts are gone
I can breathe and I'm finally free
I surrendered to the war inside of me
Listened for the tune that called out to me
But the war raged so loud for so long
That by the time i heard you, you were gone

Now I'm searching for where you are
You're so quiet now
And so far
If you can hear my call, please tell me where'd you go?
Breathe my name
Would you please call my name?
I remember feeling bliss
Remember thinking "how could i be feeling this?"
I wrapped my arms around your beating heart
Something so real, but so delicate
And when you pulled away i knew...
I knew it was the last time
I'd get to be in the
Same place you are
The last time you'd kiss my scars
And though i couldn't bear to say goodbye
You face said it all...

With heavy legs, I did my best to walk away from you
tried so hard to do what I believed I could never do
a cosmic pull between your heart and mine
snapped loose... We've used up all our time

Now you're gone and i'm staring at the empty sky
If I close my eyes and breathe deep for a while
I can think of you, and the place you are
and for just for that moment, you're not so far
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Old 04-16-2010, 07:03 PM   #2 (permalink)
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i like them. especially the first one.
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Old 04-17-2010, 05:53 AM   #3 (permalink)
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hehe thanx... half the time i dnt knw wat im writing
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Old 04-17-2010, 11:25 AM   #4 (permalink)
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lol. yep, the same thing happens to me. if i'm tryin to write, and i'm really pissed it just flows out. "frantically, i scribble down words, as they flow thru these hands. this pen will run out of ink, before i run out of words."
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Old 04-17-2010, 10:49 PM   #5 (permalink)
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One thread per songwriter, any more and they'll be chucked into the vbulletin netherworld.

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Old 04-21-2010, 10:10 PM   #6 (permalink)
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the first ones nice. i like it alot but you need to use more specific, or stand outish words like winter. it gives the song more of a character.
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Old 04-22-2010, 10:43 AM   #7 (permalink)
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thanx... il def work on my wording
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Old 08-23-2010, 11:04 PM   #8 (permalink)
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Your Very Talented your poems really entered my thoughts and made me think about my relationship I have at the moment and where it might be leading...strange timing that i should read this at this moment in time...it seems on the verge of heading that way as far as your poem "where you are" goes...reads like a prediction of the near future but I hope it doesnt come true
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