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Redbaron16 07-16-2010 10:58 PM

Rush
 
My first psong I write that when i play, doesn't sound so punkish, but i like it anyways. More out of old memories i guess
intro- 2x

verse-
pictures representing, everything un spoken
dreams checked, but never chosen
Time standing still, almost frozen
I see your smile, brings back memories
Of a time
when life was great
no worries
but now its too late

chorus-
If I could go back, I wouldn't change a thing
leave all the mistakes i made, which made me me

Then i would stay, just to see you once more
Cause I just can't wait to see you

But I guess thats why they say
Don't rush your life away

verse-

I keep thinking, of old memories
You and me, how life would be
World is just, under my thumb
Planing to, try out my luck
Saying this time, I won't let go
Of a time
when life was great
no worries
but now its too late

chorus- 2x

then end with verse chords- 2x

CitlaliScarlett 07-16-2010 11:13 PM

Love your lyrics!!! They are in fact very deep and yes, it can bring back old memories to reader/listener. It's very creative and I love the chorus in which the singer/writer is in fact reminiscing. I quite enjoy it!!! Keep it up!!!

Redbaron16 07-16-2010 11:36 PM

Haha, wow. Thank you again =). you can expect more soon, I'm always knocking in my guitar and making new things whenever they hit me

CitlaliScarlett 07-17-2010 02:53 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Redbaron16 (Post 901035)
Haha, wow. Thank you again =). you can expect more soon, I'm always knocking in my guitar and making new things whenever they hit me


As a writer for songs, don't you ever have the wierdest inspirations at time? Anyways, asking if you can check out my song lyrics and if you want you can add some music to them, because frankly, I can only write the lyrics :)

Redbaron16 07-17-2010 06:56 PM

Wierd inspirations? you have no idea =)
And sure, send me some lyrics through pm or if you want me email, w/e works. I'll try and find recording software and see what i can do for you. Though I won't be much help over the week since I'm heading down the shore, but i can work on chords and stuff for your songs lol =)

Redbaron16 07-17-2010 09:18 PM

Confusion
 
Won't be on for the rest of the week since I'll be down the shore. I didn't get any writing today but decided I'll post a song I did a few months back. Oldschool but good =)

intro strum once-
16, victim of society
16, I think I'll pass on your conformity

verse-
Trying hard, not to lose what you own
Sobriety, pretending not to get stoned
Your love, something that i really want
Your attitude, something that is constant

Chorus-
Right now I'm searching the world
More to life then a chalkboard
I'll be home when I find my destination
For now I'm stuck with confusion

verse-
Believe me, when I say I'll be back
Not easy, when your on the wrong track
Everyday, I wake up with confusion
Many days, sleeping with contradiction

-Chorus-

verse-
Winding up, thinking about the future
Sleeping it off, it's so perpendicular
Fighting off, the monsters in my head
Going against, things that are demanded

chorus-2x then the after chorus chords
:finger:

Redbaron16 07-24-2010 08:39 PM

Land of paradise
 
Punk song I made yesterday. Def sounds good when I play it, I need to get some recording software which I've been not trying to do lately. Anyway heres the lyrics:

Land of Paradise
intro-2x

verse-

I opened the door to a new world, where life isn't all that bright
Kicking down what stands tall, pride goes down like a waterfall
My mind is eaten by termites, Theres no more wrong or right
Feeling the ash land down on you, Hearing the words I loved you

chorus-
Now even though it doesn't feel right
You'll remember me for that time..in the land of paradise

verse-
Forgetting the words of wisdom, welcome to the new kingdom
One man seeking treasure, another man seeking his future
Everything just lost hope, life standing on one thin tightrope
Finally I catch my breathe, then I'm almost shot to death

chorus-

verse-
A new world is coming shortly, that is when grief will hit me
Missing what came to fast, heading in all wrong paths
Tell her I miss her greatly, this new world seems lonely
Trying to find retribution, keep finding my own contradiction

chorus-

verse chords 3x
Land of paradise
Land of paradise

Land of paradise
Land of paradise

Land of paradise
Land of paradise



CitlaliScarlett 07-25-2010 12:10 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Redbaron16 (Post 901492)
Wierd inspirations? you have no idea =)
And sure, send me some lyrics through pm or if you want me email, w/e works. I'll try and find recording software and see what i can do for you. Though I won't be much help over the week since I'm heading down the shore, but i can work on chords and stuff for your songs lol =)

Cool, thank you so much!!! You are doing awesome by the way!!!

CitlaliScarlett 07-25-2010 12:13 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Redbaron16 (Post 901579)

Chorus-
Right now I'm searching the world
More to life then a chalkboard
I'll be home when I find my destination
For now I'm stuck with confusion

verse-
Winding up, thinking about the future
Sleeping it off, it's so perpendicular
Fighting off, the monsters in my head
Going against, things that are demanded


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WOW!!! This is my favorite verse and the chorus is well-defined and I love the metaphor of a chalkboard!! Keep it up!!

Redbaron16 07-25-2010 12:19 PM

haha thank you very much


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