Mystery and strange rythms by Swedish girl

Viktoria · 10-25-2010, 05:19 AM

I’m a Swedish lyricist but I love english and I write songs in that beautifull language. I’d like your opinion about a text about which I was told it’s weird. What do you think?
Your opinion about any aspect of lyrics means so much to me :

Spacetrip

I was on my way to Mars
And so close to a star
I met a handsome man
O my, he was so cute, that guy
I stopped my travel for a while
And stayed so I could cry

He talked just by way of stardust
Never by a forecast,
But I couldn’t see clouds, nor sun,
But he was so much fun!
I had to get him to take part
So this journey could start.

Freedom, sadness.
Freedom, sadness.
Lost in space, no way home.
Give me a shelter.

So I took him by the hand
To see another land
And walk the milky way for love,
But he escaped, my dove.
“This isn’t poetry”, he said
And turned away his head.

So I left him on his star
And watch him from afar.
I must stay on the earth
Oh, well, I have to earn my mirth.
But, when I see the milky way
I always feel dismay.

Freedom, sadness.
Freedom, sadness.
Lost in space,
No way home,
Give me a shelter.

So I left him on his star,
And watch him from afar,
I must stay on the earth.
Oh well, I have to earn my mirth!
But when I see the milky way
I always feel dismay

Schmidti · 10-29-2010, 08:19 AM

Hi, Viktoria!
Oh, a beautiful pathetical text, I hope, it wasn't your partner, you write about! But it really describes very good the feeling of being in love, flying high somewhere in space and suddenly being back on earth, in reality, ...!
So, keep on writing :-)
Well than, hälsa så mycket åt Sverige av Tyskland! (I think, I still have to improve my Swedish:-)

a nice weekend!
~ Schmidti

Viktoria · 11-01-2010, 11:33 AM

Hi Schmidti!
Thanks so much for your kind words and I'm really pleased to know that you appreciated the lyrics. Ich werde Deine Grüsse an Schweden vermitteln. My compliments to your Swedish!
Take care!

~~someonecompletelyrandom~~ · 11-01-2010, 12:20 PM

There are many, many songs written by English speaking natives that don't come near to these lyrics. Although I don't particularly like songs that employ space as imagery, I think you did a good job with your metaphores and overall enjoyed the lyrics very much. This is a good start!

Keep writing.

Viktoria · 11-02-2010, 12:35 PM

Thank you so much! And I will keep on writing. Just out of curiosity: Don't you like Space Oddity by David Bowie?

Viktoria · 11-07-2010, 06:00 AM

Good taste!

Viktoria · 11-07-2010, 11:07 AM

And now, ladies and gentlemen, here’s the full musical version of Space Trip!
Feedback welcome!

youtube.com/watch?v=5VIPLzSZAdg

~~someonecompletelyrandom~~ · 11-07-2010, 11:40 AM

You've got a beautiful voice! Really enjoyed that.

Viktoria · 11-07-2010, 12:38 PM

Thanks again Conan!

Viktoria · 11-10-2010, 02:44 AM

Hi,
What do you think? It’s another side of my band. I’d like your opinion on everything you can think of. The video comes from a local TV show where we performed playback a couple of years ago.
youtube.com/watch?v=LWZpepwl8Ps

I KNOW WHAT YOU WANT

I know what you want
But you won't get it
I want you to long
You won’t regret it

It’s so 'cause I know that when you get me
You’ll choose another flower you can pick
on the planet
And I’ll lose you.

So I fight and I go only where you’re not
And you'll catch me if you can
But running’s not enough
So be daring, love

I know what you want
But you won't get it
I want you to long
You won’t regret it

It’s so 'cause I know that when you get me
You’ll choose another flower you can pick
on the planet
And I’ll lose you.

So I fight and I go only where you’re not
And you'll catch me if you can
But running’s not enough
So be daring, love

You’re cute
With your roses and your poses to impress me
What imagination you show just to reach me

I don’t want to lose it
I don’t want to hear the lies
Of the husbands when their wives
Are conquested and
So I’d better play with you

10-25-2010, 05:19 AM	#1 (permalink)
Viktoria Groupie Join Date: Oct 2010 Location: Brussels Posts: 12	Mystery and strange rythms by Swedish girl I’m a Swedish lyricist but I love english and I write songs in that beautifull language. I’d like your opinion about a text about which I was told it’s weird. What do you think? Your opinion about any aspect of lyrics means so much to me : Spacetrip I was on my way to Mars And so close to a star I met a handsome man O my, he was so cute, that guy I stopped my travel for a while And stayed so I could cry He talked just by way of stardust Never by a forecast, But I couldn’t see clouds, nor sun, But he was so much fun! I had to get him to take part So this journey could start. Freedom, sadness. Freedom, sadness. Lost in space, no way home. Give me a shelter. So I took him by the hand To see another land And walk the milky way for love, But he escaped, my dove. “This isn’t poetry”, he said And turned away his head. So I left him on his star And watch him from afar. I must stay on the earth Oh, well, I have to earn my mirth. But, when I see the milky way I always feel dismay. Freedom, sadness. Freedom, sadness. Lost in space, No way home, Give me a shelter. So I left him on his star, And watch him from afar, I must stay on the earth. Oh well, I have to earn my mirth! But when I see the milky way I always feel dismay

10-29-2010, 08:19 AM	#2 (permalink)
Schmidti Groupie Join Date: Jan 2010 Posts: 29	Hi, Viktoria! Oh, a beautiful pathetical text, I hope, it wasn't your partner, you write about! But it really describes very good the feeling of being in love, flying high somewhere in space and suddenly being back on earth, in reality, ...! So, keep on writing :-) Well than, hälsa så mycket åt Sverige av Tyskland! (I think, I still have to improve my Swedish:-) a nice weekend! ~ Schmidti

11-01-2010, 11:33 AM	#3 (permalink)
Viktoria Groupie Join Date: Oct 2010 Location: Brussels Posts: 12	Hi Schmidti! Thanks so much for your kind words and I'm really pleased to know that you appreciated the lyrics. Ich werde Deine Grüsse an Schweden vermitteln. My compliments to your Swedish! Take care!

11-01-2010, 12:20 PM	#4 (permalink)
~~someonecompletelyrandom~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Nov 2008 Posts: 4,538	There are many, many songs written by English speaking natives that don't come near to these lyrics. Although I don't particularly like songs that employ space as imagery, I think you did a good job with your metaphores and overall enjoyed the lyrics very much. This is a good start! Keep writing.

11-02-2010, 12:35 PM	#5 (permalink)
Viktoria Groupie Join Date: Oct 2010 Location: Brussels Posts: 12	Thank you so much! And I will keep on writing. Just out of curiosity: Don't you like Space Oddity by David Bowie?

11-07-2010, 06:00 AM	#6 (permalink)
Viktoria Groupie Join Date: Oct 2010 Location: Brussels Posts: 12	Good taste!

11-07-2010, 11:07 AM	#7 (permalink)
Viktoria Groupie Join Date: Oct 2010 Location: Brussels Posts: 12	And now, ladies and gentlemen, here’s the full musical version of Space Trip! Feedback welcome! youtube.com/watch?v=5VIPLzSZAdg

11-07-2010, 11:40 AM	#8 (permalink)
~~someonecompletelyrandom~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Nov 2008 Posts: 4,538	You've got a beautiful voice! Really enjoyed that.

11-07-2010, 12:38 PM	#9 (permalink)
Viktoria Groupie Join Date: Oct 2010 Location: Brussels Posts: 12	Thanks again Conan!

11-10-2010, 02:44 AM	#10 (permalink)
Viktoria Groupie Join Date: Oct 2010 Location: Brussels Posts: 12	Hi, What do you think? It’s another side of my band. I’d like your opinion on everything you can think of. The video comes from a local TV show where we performed playback a couple of years ago. youtube.com/watch?v=LWZpepwl8Ps I KNOW WHAT YOU WANT I know what you want But you won't get it I want you to long You won’t regret it It’s so 'cause I know that when you get me You’ll choose another flower you can pick on the planet And I’ll lose you. So I fight and I go only where you’re not And you'll catch me if you can But running’s not enough So be daring, love I know what you want But you won't get it I want you to long You won’t regret it It’s so 'cause I know that when you get me You’ll choose another flower you can pick on the planet And I’ll lose you. So I fight and I go only where you’re not And you'll catch me if you can But running’s not enough So be daring, love You’re cute With your roses and your poses to impress me What imagination you show just to reach me I don’t want to lose it I don’t want to hear the lies Of the husbands when their wives Are conquested and So I’d better play with you