ParadoxQeet lyrics
Hey guys, got some lyrics here that I want you to read. Writing about a lot of different themes, and I just want some tips here and there on how I could become better. 17 years old still :c all the lyrics are copyrighted to myself.
This song is unfinished for now, but I have this project and it has to be done soon. Tell me what you think about it : ) Verse 1: Death is the end of the life that we know but the journey is long and our time needs control sinking and waiting for time to pass by losing those moments we cry for at nights when we're not in our shell but out to explore it's rivers of tears through an open heart door ruins and waste of the memories we know blinded by pain so low chorus: Honor and salute the being of all Stand upside down on buildings so tall Time to collapse and stay in for a while Praise all your loved ones combined verse2: It's rain when I'm happy and sun when I'm down It's colors and rainbows when I'm out of town The wind is blowing left when I'm walking to the fight the day is lurking on it's theft to steal from the night ------------------------------------ And I've got nothing more. For now. The song is about how it is to lose a person you love very much, and how everything feels like it's pushing you down at the exact same time. The theme has been written about many, many times, but I look at it as an important theme, and I tried to do my spin on how to tell it. Tell me what you think guys! : ) |
Yo, I got this song that I'm writing. It's called "Latina Language"
Verse1 Your latina language your body complex with spanish señorita moves that's making you groove smoke on the dance floor your body can't take more when you're feeling it move "chorus"1 you come to me and you ask are you ready for your nights task I nod frequently sequently stay with me, savior me-e-e-e (fade) verse2 all lights are fading favours are trading the talk is off the walk is on the steam is on top Hips that are whispering lips that are kissing the girl you've been with all night long is making you drop "chorus"2 she's gone a long way to ask if I'm ready or if she's too fast we're dissapearing into the sheets relating to the beats not gonna sleep tonight, no-o (fade) |
Also making a song with some friends that are called something with "union" in its' name : p dno yet tho. it goes like this
verse1 (me) Some nights I don't know what to say so I pick up pen and paper and write away On tides of power we're here to stay through it all and scribble a story that contains verse2 (friend 1) Whenever we are far apart I bring your music with my heart Because I wish for a new start I wont fall, cause I remeber what remains Chorus Nothing yet, working on it :) verse3 (me + friend 2) If i feel lonely as i very often do I know that i can always find you I care so much you know that MY STAR Everytime i sweep you gently my lovely guitar |
Here's a rap song I wrote that also has a hook I wrote. I haven't really rapped anything in my life other then sitting at home or rapping for fun with my friends, but I thought I'd give it a go. The lyrical scheme is nearly the same even tho you need more flow in rap for it to be successful.
CHORUS: No more simpler than that, no more simpler then her No more simpler than him, let me talk, talk, talk to you sir No more simpler than that, no more simpler then her No more simpler than him, let me talk, talk, talk to you girl VERSE (RAP): I’m not here to run your life or story, Run how you get things or run your floor, You’re always in my way when I’m not in yours, Just move far away, fly out that door And in the end we’re all the same We’re all the same colored face in the frame We all have feelings, we all have shame We’re all the same, the same to blame There are no expectations for your dictations, For your relations with the same dictators, The same mistake without a clue Of learning about something new Something new to find out why How you can make it, have a new try CHORUS: VERSE(RAP): I saw a boy in the streets Messy, bloody threw out with his sheets Threw out with his only chance in life His chance transformed just over the night What do we do and what do we see When a bum of a boy walks over to see To see me, smell me, ask me why Why his only chance in life was a lie I’m a little sad everyday With so many fractions it’s always a different way A different way to let out all the rage A different way to let tears waste We’re not the same; we’ve never been the same I’ve never tried to claim my so-called name A feeling so deep it’s hard to renew I’m glad I got the chance to watch this view |
Song based on a friends experience. Not finished yet tho.
Verse 1 I gave you a chance to make up for your mistakes Gave you a second chance but you didn't change lent you my heart to play with and modify you sent it back cut open and ripped apart my mistakes was so gracious made the time set delay on us blue turned black and the clouds went ahead drifted away with the wind to a destination that was set |
A simple song about feelings and regrets. One of many I really enjoy playing. It's called SSS (Secret Safe Sand)
Verse 1 I know what I have done I know all my wrongs I know all my troubled speeches Only if I could reach this Pre Chorus And the problem is that it’s far, far away In a wonderland that’s not here today Chorus It hurts so bad, but I gotta let it go Gotta let the oceanwaves of hatred flow Gotta make my self understand Gotta bury it all, in my secret safe sand Verse 2 I know what I should do I know what I should say to you Greet you with hello And wave you farewell Pre chorus: Chorus: x1 Pre chorus: Chorus: x1 |
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This short song in the works is the one in your thread that grabbed my interest the most. I like it because of these two lines: "My mistakes were so gracious" (or maybe you meant "my mistake was so gracious") and, "Blue turned black and the clouds went ahead." I feel the part about the heart ripped open and sent back sounds melodramatic and a little cliche since so many songs talk about attacks on the cardiovascular system, but "gracious mistakes" sounds very human and real to me. Loving someone openly *is* gracious, since it could always end up to be a mistake in the sense that the love is unreciprocated. Loving is giving without the promise of receiving, which makes it gracious. I felt your word choice was perfect. :) I also feel "Blue turned black" is an effective (and colorful!) metaphor for the feeling of sadness turning to despondency, which is my interpretation. Elsewhere in your lyrics, you are very straight-forward with your feelings, such as when you state, "I feel lonely all the time" or "it hurts so much" or similar expressive lyrics. I like "blue turned black" because I feel it has more reserve and poetry in it. It reminds me of a bruise changing colors as well as of the shift in emotions after one has been hurt. I don't know what "made the time set delay on us" means! :( I'm not sure of the rhythm of your intended song, but I am wondering how well the syllables flow, because after reading the following two lines as poetry I wished to make changes to even them up: Your wrote: Quote:
"blue turned black and the clouds went ahead, drifting with the wind to destinations that were set." I'd like to see what happens with your lyrics for this song when you are done with it! |
Ah, thanks VEGANGELICA! You made my day man :D
Yup, I really enjoy writing that song, and some of the lines could be a bit melo dramatic. I'm still really new to the song writing process (as I have normally written short texts and stuff like that, in my mothers language, norway) and I'm gladly open for constructive critism. "made the time set delay on us" is how he's love is setting delay on the relationship by saying he loves her, for example. She feels bad and can't break up with him, thus leading to this evil and dark love circle. This is why I set "Blue turned black and the clouds went ahead" into the text as well. I will finish it, and I also got a lot of inspiration coming from everywhere now, so it should be cool! also got beautiful weather outside, haha. Thanks again for the reply, loved it! I'll post the song up when I'm done with it and you can take a look at it again! :) |
yo, wrote this new song that i'mma play public this summer around in the streets
"Busking / crowd song" verse1: I've been making an upsong for the crowd to sing to please your ears and make some cash in my bing playing in the heat under the open sky some people laugh and others stay clapping for a while tryin'a get a job to earn a buck this vacation failing every time turn to the street for music playing hoping to do good so I can keep on doing nothing but playing and make love happen chorus: cuz you're my crowd you're the people showing it loud keeping attention, complementing, making the dream happen hoping to get by this summer with more experience for new songs to unfold cuz you're THE crowd verse2: got no school, girlfriend hobbies or job just an audience who's dancing in front of me now smiling and pulling the strings of my love playing her in public like nothing before as the sun drops down and the moon shows up there's lighters and fires surrounding my cup some smiling, some crying some touched by the mood feeling as intended when I'm getting my groove |
bump, anything you guys think about it?
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I got this line that I wrote, and I ****ing enjoy it
I'm tired of people demanding and shouting, commanding the theatre to close the courtins when the actors still standing |
Working on a song that I'm in love with. It's so fun to play! Check out the lyrics, would love some feedback :D
oh you're a drug you get me high you get me by so I can stay by your side forget time and the rational reality that's filling up the space beetween you and I it's black and it's white and lets just lie about it all being in our mind ooh I know just take it slow although you wanna go fast just hold on to it and don't leave don't go lets move along the show it's you and me the phone is low just make it flow it's cool i know the frosty snow is already laid low lets pretend this is a game don't defend my friend depend on me we're gonna be fine in the end you can't amend me I can't ascend you it's a long road for two so prove me wrong so we can suspend the content remove the distance forget the wishlist leave the hat tricks lets stop this misspend |
hey guys, I know it's not always fun to only read lyrics, so I'mma give you a demo version of one of my songs SSS (secret safe sand) : )) hope you'll enjoy it
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bi5Qy_toXMg&feature=channel_video_title feedback is highly appriciated! : ) |
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UNDEFINED
feels like i'm wasting my time just wanna hold your hand in mine your love is stained something irrelevant inside lost the moments your eyes they dried behind I gave you water and sun to make you grow unlimited love and golden rings of powder snow something melted in the forest of my thoughts you disappeared and you weren't there anymore I'm feeling overwhelmed colorblinded by this line your time to shine it's dark I need a bell to chime it's rotting and I can't decide if it's undefined once I saw that sight I knew that it was wrong I wish it was unseen so I didn't have to write a song the clouds were cleared away and I was feeling good even though this isn't what it should but who am I to blame it was my decision by hand it's not my laws and definitely not my stand I'm still dreaming about it and thinking when I got time asking my self why this still is undefined I'm feeling overwhelmed colorblinded by this line your time to shine it's dark I need a bell to chime it's rotting and I can't decide if it's undefined |
I wanna take you to a place
in outer space I'll promise to spade a bead that I can never lay I'll cut to the chase after several minutes thumbling with the trace somewhere out in space reasons living reasons dying asking what it was reaching you behind the atmosphere without a single pause tripping on your fragrence moving closer to the dragons jaws somewhere in outer space no-o playing my way with words praying for a better day you know I know you know respectable doze of thousand roses and they each know a thorn in outer space ^ This is still in the making, but I got a ****ing good feeling about this one. Feeling the melody and chord progression so good |
Finished the song, and this is imo one of the coolest one I've composed. It all went so smooth and I love the take on the song. Would love to hear what you guys think about it! :))
OUTER SPACE I wanna take you to a place in outer space I'll promise to spade a bead that I can never lay I'll cut to the chase after several minutes thumbling with the trace somewhere out in space reasons living reasons dying asking what it was reaching you behind the atmosphere without a single pause tripping on your fragrence moving closer to the dragons jaws somewhere in outer space no-o playing my way with words praying for a better day getting lost at all cost in the mazes of your bay respectable doze of thousand roses and they each know a thorn in outer space Burned my skin oh I sinned a thousand times before but not like this the temperature is scraping like a kittens paw my throat is sore it's numb I guess I should've left the second floor somewhere in outer space wishing for the floor to move the walls to fall to mix up grooves you've got me by your side as long as you don't dissapprove the fact that i'm the one who've made you prove that we can do anything in outer space I'll do anything you ask me to surpass the surface and put the sun in the moon if I have too venus and mars we're troubled art oh oh let me in and show me the carte to outer space |
Random song I'm writing, and it's mostly happy. Enjoy! :)
So much love is breaken apart without a single tear tasting the heart so much cliche from love songs singing the same strofes this is not an exceptetion tho a different song visualize a life without pain no games to win and no women to gain what would the prizes mean for the effort put into when you can't win love because it aint a happy moment when we touch our feelings with a hand of salvation and a mind with no cealings waitresses with waiting angel wings winning you the love you deserve sometimes the ground is cold and the love is untold lets hope for the story to unfold sun rays of catterpie strings blowing in butterfly wings rainbows in making the rain is taking the cliche part of the song and its means because I play the same game without enough shame I don't know what those flags mean when I was young the smiles were enough tho the bombs destroyed my teens dig deeper dig steady it's a long way til we're ready what we've found is gold the story untold and the memories are bold resting beneath the scolding water wipes us off the floor like dust swimming in the chaos so clear whispering slowly how you should've told me to stay away from there |
The Moon / Bella Luna
the moon is a picture up on the blue painted wall hanging like a courtin above us all oh shining brighter than the sun and stars combined lightning up the sky the nightlight rewinds bella luna you are the mother and child gold and silver king and queen whispering the whisperers the messages oh bella luna good night i'll never live to see your dying day so let me please help you in some way I can't dance, I can't love let me feed your soul I'll dance on your dark side with sun stone soles I can play guitar and see through your mighty disguise crying inside and you want it out let me play you a song to sing my friend we can dance on jupiter and run saturns' rings lend me your peace and i'll give you my wings bella luna you are my maker and my teacher gold and silver king and queen whispering the whispers the messages oh bella luna sleep tight |
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every captain needs a sinking ship every living flame dies when oxygen forfeits every child was made by two peoples love melting two parts into one whole it's summer and warm you want the winter and cold when the winter arrives you miss the summer most you want day at night and the moon to shine as the morning sun you want tomorrows feast but talk about yesterdays run pre chorus this is so clever use of treasures gold instead of shoes cold instead of food chorus Opposite attracts add and subtract love times people makes a whole lot of mess gravity wont let me go people wont let me stay I hope there's a place in beetween but for now I wont complain |
D-A-Adimish-BM-(FM)-G-A-D
yellow sky and brilliant blue lights flying above us in a green air stripe blood streaming red as a cold persons cheeks blue hands and feet violet peace oh this pretty masquerade colours in different shades love is pouring down as rain your face is a painting oh i've been waiting to draw those lips so red flowers blooming blue and white your face is folding out the time those green brown eyes are such a fantastic sight I just might stear a little second longer before oh this pretty masquerade colours in so many different shades love is pouring down as rain as rain as rain not quite finished yet tho |
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This one is called "In Time" : ) verse 1 I can be your superman I can be your only hand the sun when it rains one that makes you sane and say that everything is going to be fine oh with the wind you outgrow the good when the trees whisper your name in time pre chorus save this song and buy yourself some time let the problems flow out of sight chorus make me safe lets try to run away in time hope the clouds will stay for a while so the closet light hides me away in time verse 2 treasure treasure you're holding me together let's try to keep it pleasure so we don't have to fall back our roof is falling breaking the installments guess it wasn't timeless our ship is off its' track pre chorus save this song and buy yourself some time let the problems flow out of sight chorus make me safe lets try to run away in time hope the clouds will stay for a while so the closet light hides me away in time bridge(?) with humble words we're crossing roads you enter mine and I enter yours surreal as it is the sun is setting across the sea chorusx2 |
This prohabition self decieving center we living in
can't ever tell our feelings practice taking cealings of seas within I would love to see the trees dance with flames and tame the powers we need if pigs can fly and water is hollow I'll join the war and seize the greed - something I'm writing on now, reviews of this and all other lyrics are highly appriciated! I love feedback : ) |
hey guys! I got a video up of me singing and playing my original song "Undefined", and I would love some feedback on both lyrics and music, thanks! : D
‪Undefined by ParadoxQeet - Original‬‏ - YouTube |
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