irisblind

I just joined and this section seemed to be the first thing to have attracted me.

( I will be posting all my lyrical work in this thread **)

I am somewhat new to the concept of songwriting, although i have had a few mediocre attempts ( which we even performed to somewhat positive reception, but i am just a bit critical of myself) . With this i kind of improvised for an extended and have a loose basis for a song. These lyrics are inspired by my improvised vocals when perform as well as the flow and feel of the sections, i actually find this to be the best thing for my songwriting in the future as my improvisations are my strength. It kind of has a dark tone with progressive elements and i prefer to play it on my semi acoustic in half step down with C#. If that gives any indication of the sound...

When Soul Drags Behind

Can you feel me
reaching out from the other side
of the hills of forever more.
Can you whisper
something hopeful in this life
to bring me up now, to the land
where I can find the reason why

When soul
just drags on behind
men seem to divide
No mercy, just instinct now
two brothers fighting and we wonder how
Such evil seeps through
This earth onto you
Just power, greed and twisted minds
At least inside I’m not afraid to die


In this battle field,
all are dead yet two remain
just you and I
and there is no victory to claim
can you feel me
reaching out from the other side
I see the sadness in your eyes
I know it well as its also mine

Rangeroad15

I love the way the verses flow, I kind of get what the music could sound like as well. Overall I think you have penned some nice lyrics. Nothing is cliche at all. Can you check out my post called dirty little and let me know how I did? Thanks man and good job

irisblind

Thanks man. I really try to give my lyrics a nice balance between philosophical and personal. I will check out you stuff definitely.

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When soul drags behind..
...Men seem to divide

irisblind

Drowning is Excess

All my cares have faded into light
with these eyes I stare into the night
desire burns inside but what am i looking for
We search in darkness for the thing we've not seen before
Curiosity
Heroin and Whiskey
Do you feel alive?
Cause soon enough you'll feel death!

Are you Awakening ( No sir not yet)
Do you feel alive (No sir I'm dead)
Your mind is burning out ( I just don't care)
Lost in an endless night, afraid of the daylight
You can't admit it cause you're
drowning in excess

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When soul drags behind..
...Men seem to divide