I Got A Story To Tell

2paclives · 06-05-2012, 11:13 AM

I got a story 2 tell
So I'ma start at the beginin
My names Dan an I smoke weed for a livin
Hip-Hop driven lyrical magician
Girls have got my handsome face imbedded in there vision
Now listen I'm never lacking wisdom
My CRB's so clean that in the sun it ****in glistens
But please don't get it twisted
I'm just a lonely misfit
Smoke away the pain
Wish I never existed
I'm try'na make the best outta bad situation
Gotta thank God everyday for my creation
Wanna make it big but i gotta have the patience
Need to find a good girl an make her my relation
(FAST RAP!!! )These verses get worse after every burn of this herb that i have these words turn into blurs an its mad I slur this into a rap.
I got endo ash on my cap , got holes in my shirt on the lap, I'd move but I might collapse, Eyes rouge and about to relapse.
(Insert a couple of lines here)
Bitch I've been cool since the night I was born
Came out the womb with my high-tops on
Pimp slapped the nurse as i fired up the bong
11th of november the birth of a don

Gucci Little Piggy · 06-05-2012, 11:47 AM

Oh... Err... The thing is, I'm not a big fan of gangsta rap so maybe I'm biased but the lyrics do seem kinda generic to me. I'll hand the more insightful stuff over to the guys who are more familiar with the genre I guess.

~~someonecompletelyrandom~~ · 06-05-2012, 12:36 PM

These are lyrics you could only get away with if you were already famous.

And it was 1996.

~~FireWaterBurn~~ · 06-05-2012, 12:44 PM

Refused to tuck in your shirt? Shit son.

Generic stoner lyrics, never heard that before.

I really just wanna know where 'Pac lives though

2paclives · 06-05-2012, 12:54 PM

thats exactly the style i was goin for lol ahhhhhh '96... the time before everyone turned into a bitch.

Blarobbarg · 06-05-2012, 01:08 PM

No.

Just... no.

Gucci Little Piggy · 06-05-2012, 01:41 PM

OK so it wasn't just me.

If you wanna do hiphop, take an example to Death Grips. Even though what they're doing can't simply be considered hiphop.

2paclives · 06-05-2012, 02:44 PM

i changed it up abit.. wot ya think now? btw ent gotta clue who death grip are...

~~FireWaterBurn~~ · 06-05-2012, 02:47 PM

Bro we are gonna keep saying it's terrible. Rapping is so much about voice, delivery, and flow and it doesn't come across in text. There is no beat or anything. Unless you record something I don't see how you are going to get any feedback worthwhile

2paclives · 06-05-2012, 02:49 PM

truee dattt lol im recordin in a studio some time soon so il upload it onto here..... if you can?

06-05-2012, 11:13 AM	#1 (permalink)
2paclives Groupie Join Date: Jun 2012 Location: Birmingham, England Posts: 8	I Got A Story To Tell I got a story 2 tell So I'ma start at the beginin My names Dan an I smoke weed for a livin Hip-Hop driven lyrical magician Girls have got my handsome face imbedded in there vision Now listen I'm never lacking wisdom My CRB's so clean that in the sun it ***in glistens But please don't get it twisted I'm just a lonely misfit Smoke away the pain Wish I never existed I'm try'na make the best outta bad situation Gotta thank God everyday for my creation Wanna make it big but i gotta have the patience Need to find a good girl an make her my relation (FAST RAP!!! )These verses get worse after every burn of this herb that i have these words turn into blurs an its mad I slur this into a rap. I got endo ash on my cap , got holes in my shirt on the lap, I'd move but I might collapse, Eyes rouge and about to relapse. (Insert a couple of lines here) Bitch I've been cool since the night I was born Came out the womb with my high-tops on Pimp slapped the nurse as i fired up the bong 11th of november the birth of a don Last edited by 2paclives; 06-05-2012 at 02:45 PM.*

06-05-2012, 11:47 AM	#2 (permalink)
Gucci Little Piggy Music Addict Join Date: May 2012 Posts: 315	Oh... Err... The thing is, I'm not a big fan of gangsta rap so maybe I'm biased but the lyrics do seem kinda generic to me. I'll hand the more insightful stuff over to the guys who are more familiar with the genre I guess. __________________ My Last.fm. Please add me. Now. NOW. FUCK THE PORN IT CAN WAIT. My RYM thingy I now have a tumblr and I do stuff on it

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Blarobbarg Do good. Join Date: Feb 2011 Location: Minneapolis, Minnesota Posts: 2,065	No. Just... no. __________________ https://rateyourmusic.com/~Blarobbarg ｡･::･ﾟ★,｡･::･ﾟ☆　^my RYM^　｡･::･ﾟ★,｡･::･ﾟ☆ (◠‿◠✿)

06-05-2012, 01:41 PM	#7 (permalink)
Gucci Little Piggy Music Addict Join Date: May 2012 Posts: 315	OK so it wasn't just me. If you wanna do hiphop, take an example to Death Grips. Even though what they're doing can't simply be considered hiphop. __________________ My Last.fm. Please add me. Now. NOW. FUCK THE PORN IT CAN WAIT. My RYM thingy I now have a tumblr and I do stuff on it

06-05-2012, 12:36 PM	#3 (permalink)
~~someonecompletelyrandom~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Nov 2008 Posts: 4,538	These are lyrics you could only get away with if you were already famous. And it was 1996.

06-05-2012, 12:44 PM	#4 (permalink)
~~FireWaterBurn~~ Account Disabled Join Date: May 2012 Posts: 99	Refused to tuck in your shirt? Shit son. Generic stoner lyrics, never heard that before. I really just wanna know where 'Pac lives though

06-05-2012, 12:54 PM	#5 (permalink)
2paclives Groupie Join Date: Jun 2012 Location: Birmingham, England Posts: 8	thats exactly the style i was goin for lol ahhhhhh '96... the time before everyone turned into a bitch.

06-05-2012, 02:44 PM	#8 (permalink)
2paclives Groupie Join Date: Jun 2012 Location: Birmingham, England Posts: 8	i changed it up abit.. wot ya think now? btw ent gotta clue who death grip are...

06-05-2012, 02:47 PM	#9 (permalink)
~~FireWaterBurn~~ Account Disabled Join Date: May 2012 Posts: 99	Bro we are gonna keep saying it's terrible. Rapping is so much about voice, delivery, and flow and it doesn't come across in text. There is no beat or anything. Unless you record something I don't see how you are going to get any feedback worthwhile

06-05-2012, 02:49 PM	#10 (permalink)
2paclives Groupie Join Date: Jun 2012 Location: Birmingham, England Posts: 8	truee dattt lol im recordin in a studio some time soon so il upload it onto here..... if you can?