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Heart of Nails 05-24-2005 02:16 AM

I Want To
 
this is my first set of lyrics posted here...reviews etc please...

I Want To

What is it that I’m living for,
I don’t think I’ll breathe anymore,
Is life this bad or is just me,
Push my fingers into my eyes so I don’t see,
All the things that break my heart,

I want to bleed,
I want to scream,
I want to die,
I want to…

Kinda feel like I’m okay,
Satisfied I’ve got my way,
I’ve killed the life in my heart,
And now I stay in the dark,
So I can feel this hate,

I want to bleed,
I want to scream,
I want to die,
I want to…

I want to…
I want to…
Bleed,
I want to…
I want to…
Scream,
I want to…
I want to…
Die,

I want to bleed,
I want to scream,
I want to die,
I want to…

My life is a joke to you,
Stopped being happy and bled right through,
I won’t let me control my soul,
My head is like a hole,
And now I’ve reached the bottom,

I want to bleed,
I want to scream,
I want to die,
I want to.

jamisonparker 05-24-2005 02:22 PM

those are so clique... and unoriginal

PerFeCTioNThrUSileNCe 05-24-2005 04:44 PM

not horrible....but as everyone who posts on here will say: its been done before. the lyrics are also too simple for my taste, there isnt enough content. with your next song, try to make a little more of a story (if you take my meaning), rather than just talking about how much someone hates you, or saying "i want to die". people go for songs, not three and a half minutes of talking about how you want to kill yourself.

Trauma 05-24-2005 06:18 PM

^
That depends if you talk about suicide in an interesting manner.

Like...
Look on the bright side suicide
Lost eye-sight I'm on your side
Angel left wing, right wing, broken wing.
Lack of iron and/or sleeping.... nice, beautiful.

Umm, your poem Heart of Nails is cliched A LITTLE....lol.
I think it's just that teenage-angst phase.
Be a little more creative, you can do it.

dog 05-25-2005 06:43 AM

i myself think they were pretty corny/lame. im just not into music like that


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