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Old 03-25-2013, 02:57 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Default criticism for lyrics

looking for someone to help me change somthing that he think can be changed for the lyrics

the day you were gone 9/11


Every day we awoke beside each other
But now it's not you it's just another
man that i see beside me in my bed
I just can't get the fact that you're now dead
It's crawling inside so very slowly
I can't take it anymore I'm so lonely
Every night in my dreams saying you're right behind
Where are you, I can't see you I'm losing my mind

Since that day I'm not alive
I'm going crazy I cant survive
You were my heart and my soul
And since you're gone this world's a black hole
Why did it happen on that special day
I remember it like it was yesterday

I tried to get over you but I don't
Always a voice inside me saying I won't
Our life is not going according to plan
And now I'm married to another man
But you will always own my heart
I'll never forget you, without you I'm falling apart

Since that day I'm not alive
I'm going crazy I can't survive
Maybe we just weren't meant to be
Maybe this is our destiny
It's like it was yesterday I remember
But I'll never forget it, the 11th of September
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