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Old 06-07-2005, 05:19 PM   #1 (permalink)
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hey kids,

i got some new stuff. some of these are rewritten oldies.

Escapist Theory
i am being held down
i am being held down

i am falling through
this wall of escapist technique
and i am willingly going
into darkness without abandon

i am throwing caution to the wind
and i am walking into stormclouds

i am being held down
i am being held down
please

i am nothing less than what you've given
this shell of steel and brittle glass
and i am willingly going
into this thresher of souls

i am going, knives out
and i am not stopping until i've done

i am being held down
i am being held down
please, won't you

i am trying to find a way through
this reflection of double-crossing
and i am willingly going
into retribution without repair

i am choking on this snag in plans
and i am seeking your faith in me

i am being held down
i am being held down
please, won't you
please, won't you
----
1:
i am going to take your arms and
this mouth of yours with which you curse
and i am going to put them
into someone who could use them better than you
----
2:
i am willing to give my soul for someone
this endless hell of constant battle
and i am willingly going
into this lake of fire at my end



And now it seems we canít rhyme

Fleeting

Thatís all I can bring myself to say

Thatís all that describes you

Tear me open and look inside

Sew me up and hear my lies

Tear me open and kill me again

Seems your wrong and dead too

But knowing how our play ends (in tragedy it seems) will we rewrite the ending? Or hope some miracle will help us survive. Arenít we done pretending?

But your so fleeting and I can only sit here my hands tied. You know where I am. You speak to me but you voice is too fleeting



Sick From The Mirror

Ötransmission interruptedÖ

take from my hand
the knife I mended
take from my hand
the knife I mended

reflection is scattered
your face is so scattered
pull the wedding veil over your eyes
thereís a bomb inside the altar, my love, goodnight

take the knife from my hand.
Take the knife from my hand.
Take the knife from my hand.
Take. The. Knife.

Cut loose the ropes that bind your hands
Weíll stop the clock the final time
Our final walk in the light it all begins tonight

Strange how I see you and know nothing
Strange how I touch you, and can know nothing

Iíll try to diffuse the bomb but Iím not making promises
a lethal injection of love hits our veins
Iím so sorry, I tried so ****ing hard
Please take the knifeÖ




23 Hours Left In The Worst Day Of My Life

Sleep is so persuasive when youíre desperate
Iíll turn off the alarm, try to turn off the world
Leave me to corroded paper and dimming light

You and me, could be, another fatal memory

Better instinct says no but Iíll over analyze
Funny how the lines on your arms run parallel
I noticed that the first night
Notice how it was already the last?

And we dance in this endless waltz
Let the dissonant symphony wash over you, wash over me
The bitter notes mix with sour melodies
It causes us to fade into obscurity
Quick, grab my hand before weíre too far goneÖ

I wonít wait for this time; half past 2 and Iíll leave
I swear you wonít make it; youíre in a speeding coffin
A final rose is best it seems, to please, and me
Iíll die with the knowledge of what happened

And we dance in this endless waltz
Let the dissonant symphony wash over you, wash over me
The bitter notes mix with sour melodies
The last word I ever said was please
But I slew the final kiss you missed and now weíre too far gone



Spitting Back Words With Just A Bit More Venom

Weíve reached the end my dear
And Iíve got the rope right here
Enough to hang you right where I want you

Iíll sing back your words
Now tell me how it hurts
To not have any recourse or grace

Iíll look upon you for the last time tonight
Hoping that what Iím doing can start to set things right
Loving the unloved can hurt so much some times
Lets rip the story from the headlines!

How could you think Iíd help you?
Your headís on my shoulder wanting some comfort

Iíll say it was the only way
And I wonít feel guilty or ashamed
I planned this every night I lied

I hope you can see
The scars youíve given me
And so ends all your voiceless whispers

Iíll look upon you for the last time tonight
Hoping that what Iím doing can start to set things right
Loving the unloved can hurt so much some times
Lets rip the story from the headlines
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Old 06-08-2005, 04:40 AM   #2 (permalink)
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I like the last one. That's a really nice concept dude! Strange rhyme pattern but every genius raises an eyebrow or two!

The title seems a bit long to me, but then I can't think of a better one so I'll leave it!

What kind of music does this go to? That would help me paint abetter picture in my mind's ear...:-S

if you're in a generous mood please give mine a crit: http://www.musicbanter.com/showthread.php?t=6958 but I don't mind if you can't be bothered
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Old 06-08-2005, 11:09 AM   #3 (permalink)
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Its meant for a metalcore ish type band although with alot of soft guitars and piano work. very ecclectic.
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Old 06-08-2005, 11:32 AM   #4 (permalink)
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mmm, yeah I can imagine that quite well, good job soldier!
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Old 06-08-2005, 02:57 PM   #5 (permalink)
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I like the last two particularly
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Old 06-08-2005, 04:07 PM   #6 (permalink)
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Rise, you are a very talented lyricist!!!!!!! All the stuff that you've posted on this forum has been very good material, and I'm not the type of person to hand out unsolicited opinions on the stuff people write. I don't know how many times people have insisted that I read their stuff, and Iv'e found myself stuck trying to find something remotely nice to say about it ( I hate that!). Congratulations you definitely don't suck!!!!!
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Old 06-10-2005, 10:50 AM   #7 (permalink)
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I truly enjoy reading your lyrics. Great stuff man. Awesome.
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