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Old 06-11-2005, 09:33 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Temptress
Red lips
Two reasons to die
Top and bottom
Angel and demon

They hook my sweet bouquet while it lulls them
Tongue to tongue
More like claw to flower
Like the eagle, you snatch my affection

Protect, sweet darling bee
You stung me in the eyes
Prowl, ferocious old lion
You clawed my smile with your talons

Nameless beast, show yourself
Stop the parody
You are no human
Cloaked wolf, you seek to wound me

I want to give you the chance, again
I suppose my ignorance prevails
It gives rise to this sweet bliss
I could frolic through meadows of denial

Kiss you like I did one thousand times before
Maim me like you did one million times before
Hurt can be divided into eras
Pain can only be synonymous with existence

Your gates taste of bitterness
They close and open as they wish
God must control those two beasts
Angel and demon; my weaknesses

Why does red prevail when the angel must be white?
You put no lipstick on this morning, dear
Why is disdain not pale color?
Your lips are advertising my blood

-Jake 6/11/05
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Old 06-11-2005, 10:02 PM   #2 (permalink)
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i think it's quite good. i think it's really like, different than other lyrics posted here. i like it.
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Old 06-12-2005, 11:58 AM   #3 (permalink)
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I'm guessing this has refences to the whore of Babylon?

yeah.

i like it. the meter needs cleaning up but other than that very nice.
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Old 06-12-2005, 12:52 PM   #4 (permalink)
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No lol, no references of any sort.
It was free verse, I didn't think of rhyme scheme or anything.
I wrote it in about 10 minutes, the only thing I thought about was four lines per stanza.
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Old 06-13-2005, 01:27 AM   #5 (permalink)
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really good. i like it a lot. amazing for only taking you ten minutes.
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