opinions on my lyrics please?! :)
How do you write good lyrics?
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Hi, this piece sounds like she's reminiscing about a man whom she used to be with but it sounds like they're not in this relationship any longer, but she still keeps thinking of him and she wants him back!
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I really like them. It seems like it's about feeling jealous of a guy you were/are with, being with another girl in the past. Feeling like you shouldn't be jealous and it's all in your head but it's still there.
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It looks pretty good , there are some changes that need to be made tho.
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I like it.
My critique was gonna be it was too obvious and simple but it's actually fine the way it is. :) Quote:
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if you take out the first line , she touches his chest it works
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This is that fucking Killers song.
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Quote:
"Now they're going to bed And my stomach is sick And it's all in my head But she's touching his chest now He takes off her dress now" |
First thing that popped in my head was The Killers, and so I immediately dismissed this person and their 'lyrics' of theirs...please.
If you're going to write lyrics/poetry. Don't rip other people off. That sh*t isn't cool. |
I know that Killers song but it didn't come to mind until Josef mentioned it now everybody is echoing his post.
Give the guy a break he didn't exactly copy the killer song word for word. |
bah give him her a break killers and cold play rip of david bowie anyway
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and more to the like killers copied iggy pop to to name another the lyrics dont even beat u can't claim lyrics copied unless with a beat dont even have a beat dude has words lelt him or have it , for all we k now could be a death meatal song , let the words be
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