Some of my first (bling, member, title, solo, memories)

shapiro · 07-15-2005, 09:25 AM

This one has a Deftones vibe to it. No title yet.

I look through the glass
Outside the rain is falling down
Memories have held me back
So I’ve learned to let them go
(chorus) : I spread my wings and fly
Over oceans and seas
I feel like I could touch the sky
Since this burden is lifted from me
V2:the pain has faded out
And left me tranquility
This peace that I feel
Gives me an emotional high
My past was filled with pain
Pain that left me scarred
But the future I see
Looks really good for me
(chorus2x)
(solo)
(verse one and chorus all acoustic and quiet)
(chourus full blast distortion)

The guitar part for this one wuz by my little bro. A lil heavier soundin’ vocals at some parts but the chorus vocals are kinda like Johnathan Davis’s high pitched soundin’ voice.

Insomnia (Dream World)
My body’s shivering
My eyes are bloodshot
My hands are trembling
The T.V.’s all iv’e got
Is this my reward
What iv’e been waiting for
I think not
(pre-c): some call it insomnia
But I call it a dream
A dream I can’t wake up from
And nuthins’ as it seems
(chorus): livin’ in my dream world
A place I can’t escape
Inside I feel so cold
Oh god I hate this place
(verse two):lying on the table
Hands a nd feet spread out
I can’t remember what happened
I think I just passed out
(chorus)

angel18 · 07-15-2005, 09:33 AM

the second one is good. but i'm not too sure about the first one!

Jess Kaye · 07-21-2005, 12:16 AM

yeah..first one's a bit..kiddy.

riseagainstrocks · 07-22-2005, 01:16 PM

Both sound the same and rehash the same old themes.

Come up with something different.

07-15-2005, 09:25 AM	#1 (permalink)
shapiro Groupie Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: NC Posts: 7	Some of my first This one has a Deftones vibe to it. No title yet. I look through the glass Outside the rain is falling down Memories have held me back So I’ve learned to let them go (chorus) : I spread my wings and fly Over oceans and seas I feel like I could touch the sky Since this burden is lifted from me V2:the pain has faded out And left me tranquility This peace that I feel Gives me an emotional high My past was filled with pain Pain that left me scarred But the future I see Looks really good for me (chorus2x) (solo) (verse one and chorus all acoustic and quiet) (chourus full blast distortion) The guitar part for this one wuz by my little bro. A lil heavier soundin’ vocals at some parts but the chorus vocals are kinda like Johnathan Davis’s high pitched soundin’ voice. Insomnia (Dream World) My body’s shivering My eyes are bloodshot My hands are trembling The T.V.’s all iv’e got Is this my reward What iv’e been waiting for I think not (pre-c): some call it insomnia But I call it a dream A dream I can’t wake up from And nuthins’ as it seems (chorus): livin’ in my dream world A place I can’t escape Inside I feel so cold Oh god I hate this place (verse two):lying on the table Hands a nd feet spread out I can’t remember what happened I think I just passed out (chorus)

07-21-2005, 12:16 AM	#3 (permalink)
Jess Kaye Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: dOwN uNDAh Posts: 42	yeah..first one's a bit..kiddy. __________________ SHUGAH-PEOW

07-22-2005, 01:16 PM	#4 (permalink)
riseagainstrocks Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: DC Posts: 3,320	Both sound the same and rehash the same old themes. Come up with something different. __________________ One note timeless, came out of nowhere...

07-15-2005, 09:33 AM	#2 (permalink)
angel18 Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 129	the second one is good. but i'm not too sure about the first one!