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Old 07-15-2005, 09:12 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Mmmmmm, hey fellas.... Wrote this a while ago and just thought I'd see what you thought of it.... It's pretty long so yeah.....

Verse 1

I see your shadow, dark as night,
Flit across the moonlit pavement,
I want to ask you something,
But the words, they escape me,
I think of times gone by,
And a forgotten era past,
I hear voices calling out to me,
About the way it was before,

Pre-Chorus


And the things that I hear,
The things that I say,
These things are unimportant,
In the mundane day to day,
The thing you want is here,
If you want to take it now,
But think before you act,
Before you make this solemn vow,

Chorus


I want to go back,
But it’s too late now,
There’s been too much said and done,
Too much has gone on,
I want things to be like,
They were when times were good,
I want to go back,
Back to before,

(4 bar interlude)

Verse 2


If everything’s so different now,
How come we don’t know why?
The things we ask of ourselves,
Remain unanswered in the night,
When I think of those who’re gone now,
I want to cry out loud,
I want to ask “Why did you take them?”
Back in before,

Pre-Chorus


Chorus


(4 bar interlude)

Bridge/Verse 3

Back when good was good,
And bad was bad,
God looked down on the earth below,
Evil wore no mask,
But the things we did,
And the things we do,
These stop us from being friends again,
Condemned forever to this hell,

Pre-Chorus



Chorus



Outro


Back to be before,
Yeah back to before,
Back to good and purity,
Without the rotten core,
Back to before,
Yeah back to before,
When we were good, and they were bad,
Back to all that we had,


So yeah, tell us what you all think....
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Old 07-15-2005, 10:20 PM   #2 (permalink)
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i like it. the right amount of sentimentality mixed in with the poppishness of some of the lyrics. well written indeed.
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Old 07-15-2005, 10:58 PM   #3 (permalink)
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thanks RAR.....
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Old 07-16-2005, 01:32 AM   #4 (permalink)
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hey, Pastor, i'm proud of ya! i mean i remember these lyrics, but they're a bit different, you did some changes, ey? that's cool, change is good

keep up the good work we're here to support you
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Old 07-16-2005, 07:00 AM   #5 (permalink)
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thats probably the only song i like in this thing. good work
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Old 07-16-2005, 05:19 PM   #6 (permalink)
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yo, i was as we say in the South "smelling that thurr" smells good 2 man.
all the ingredients were well mixed in there. South kitchen material.

keep it up man
i can relate

can ya digg it-lol
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Old 07-17-2005, 02:49 AM   #7 (permalink)
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thanks people... now i just have to write some musak to it.........
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Old 07-17-2005, 03:17 AM   #8 (permalink)
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Well you got it nice and mapped out, so that shouldn't be too hard.
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Old 07-17-2005, 04:10 AM   #9 (permalink)
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yeah... got a couple of ideas.... just gotta work it out with my band....
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Old 07-17-2005, 10:47 AM   #10 (permalink)
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Thats really good.. well done.
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