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Old 06-21-2015, 09:37 PM   #1 (permalink)
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i just wrote this after registering too the site. for a but of fun.
critique is more than welcome....

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Brian,



"This Pain"
2015 Brian Eggertsen, All Rights Reserved.

i have been sitting here
for a while now,
tryna clear out my mind
but don't know how!
i got so many thoughts
chasing ideas,
that my head's begun too
feel kinda weird.

it's been creeping up on me,
almost everyday - lately.
even the dimmest of light,
creates terror if it reaches my eye...

This pain,
has become
the worst sorta friend.
This pain,
cannot hide
it's criminal intent.
over
& again,
i'm loosing at this game.
it's strange,
i actually
thought i won but then,
This Pain
This Pain
again.

i have been laying here
for too long now,
tryna relax in silence
but i have my doubts.
spent 3-3rd's of my day
flat on my back,
hoping for a tomorrow
better than that.

it's been creeping up on me,
almost everyday - lately.
even the dimmest of light,
creates terror if it reaches my eye...

Repeat Chorus:

i'm barely holding
on with the tip of my nails.
it's like the universe
wants me too fail.
but i'm not giving in,
or letting go without a fight.
go ahead, take your biggest bite....

Repeat Chorus:
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Old 06-21-2015, 09:51 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Old 08-14-2015, 05:24 AM   #3 (permalink)
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It'a very sad, but I like it! I really like the line of "spend three thirds of my day flat on my back." Very artistically put.
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