I'm Over You

gabbagabba_hey · 09-09-2005, 05:10 AM

Rap Off!!!!!!

Pansy! · 09-09-2005, 06:12 AM

Ya know what bitch? Im ova you!

Haha

Pansy! · 09-09-2005, 06:40 AM

Oh. Oh, Renee!

Tell everyone about jessica and the "weeeeeeeeeeeed"!

EDGE · 09-10-2005, 04:37 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Spike*Spiegel

alright then, YOU write something better, if you think you know so much.

Are you actually backing this guy up?

TheBig3 · 09-14-2005, 04:10 PM

it takes alot of balls to post something here, you cna't just go around smashing peopls fragile ego about their own work. Its always been said that the best writers have the thinnest skin.

riseagainstrocks · 09-15-2005, 05:09 PM

in this instance however, it's like teaching a mule to speak. dependant on the age of whoever this was, they need to A) mature (much of my early writing was forced rhymes and such) or B) choose a different style. It is hard to write a good rap song (not gangsta rap, but a real rap. like Mr. Lif or Aesop Rock).

Bezerk, ease up on the rhyming and the overly brutal hatred towards this whore. Unless you want to join Korn most of your "rhymes" will never work. at all. try and be more indistinct or have some sort of metaphor. Straight forward works sometimes but not now.

Online_belisha_Promoter · 09-28-2005, 10:45 AM

it rhymes well

anticipation · 09-28-2005, 02:52 PM

this is a ****ing diddy pop song, not rap.

jibber · 09-28-2005, 09:53 PM

Quote:

Hell I am like Juggernaut from the X-Men.
You are like someone at the age of 10!

hahahahahahahahahaha

and my personal favorite, right before he insulted said girl by calling her a ten year old:

Quote:

If I knew you were gonna use me I would have spent my money on yugioh.
Instead I ended up wasting it on a dirty ho.

now, correct me if i'm wrong, but isnt yugioh a sort of animated cartoon similar to pokemon?

seriously kid, it's great if writing relieves stress or helps you get things off your chest, but if you want to write quality lyrics, try for a more sophisticated set of metaphors instead of just writing down the first set of words that come to your head.

**Scarlett O'Hara** · 10-06-2005, 06:33 PM

I absolutely hate rap. But this isn't rap, this is just crap! <----rhyming YO!

09-09-2005, 05:10 AM	#11 (permalink)
gabbagabba_hey Dont Get Raped In Cancun Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: land of treason Posts: 193	Rap Off!!!!!! __________________ go on out get some more go on out to the bar the market or the liquor store friends dont let friends get lost in chinatown

09-09-2005, 06:12 AM	#12 (permalink)
Pansy! Like Friend like Lover! Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: In a house... Posts: 34	Ya know what bitch? Im ova you! Haha __________________ It breaks my heart. We’ve applied mascara to the radio, But that’s just a quick fix and we need a little more. Does it matter to you at all? Are you listening? Or have you tuned out? Get by. Get gone. Get high. Get wronged.

09-09-2005, 06:40 AM	#13 (permalink)
Pansy! Like Friend like Lover! Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: In a house... Posts: 34	Oh. Oh, Renee! Tell everyone about jessica and the "weeeeeeeeeeeed"! __________________ It breaks my heart. We’ve applied mascara to the radio, But that’s just a quick fix and we need a little more. Does it matter to you at all? Are you listening? Or have you tuned out? Get by. Get gone. Get high. Get wronged.

09-14-2005, 04:10 PM	#15 (permalink)
TheBig3 killedmyraindog Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: Boston, Massachusetts Posts: 11,172	it takes alot of balls to post something here, you cna't just go around smashing peopls fragile ego about their own work. Its always been said that the best writers have the thinnest skin. __________________ I've moved to a new address

09-15-2005, 05:09 PM	#16 (permalink)
riseagainstrocks Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: DC Posts: 3,320	in this instance however, it's like teaching a mule to speak. dependant on the age of whoever this was, they need to A) mature (much of my early writing was forced rhymes and such) or B) choose a different style. It is hard to write a good rap song (not gangsta rap, but a real rap. like Mr. Lif or Aesop Rock). Bezerk, ease up on the rhyming and the overly brutal hatred towards this whore. Unless you want to join Korn most of your "rhymes" will never work. at all. try and be more indistinct or have some sort of metaphor. Straight forward works sometimes but not now. __________________ One note timeless, came out of nowhere...

09-28-2005, 10:45 AM	#17 (permalink)
Online_belisha_Promoter Groupie Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: wales Posts: 7	it rhymes well

09-28-2005, 02:52 PM	#18 (permalink)
anticipation Music Addict Join Date: Jun 2005 Posts: 3,565	this is a ****ing diddy pop song, not rap.

10-06-2005, 06:33 PM	#20 (permalink)
Scarlett O'Hara Make it so Join Date: Oct 2005 Posts: 6,181	I absolutely hate rap. But this isn't rap, this is just crap! <----rhyming YO! __________________ "Elph is truly an enfant terrible of the forum, bless and curse him" - Marie, Queen of Thots