I'm g**, and I'm assuming they did it for very good reasons. (as in people using it as you're so g**, or that's g**...it denotes such a negative connotation, that I honestly don't mind it being censored) hmmm I'm queer. (it worked!)

well, whatever sinks your submarine! ive tried that road, and still am but its not working for me. your lucky

oh, relationship wise I'm failing at every angle. I said it worked for the word queer, since it didn't block it

I would turn this into a death metal song.

Yea my irises are scary I KNOW but yours lower the temperature of the room.

I'm trying to tell you it would be easier if you came out of the closet dammit.

ummm... someone that actually likes me.

^Know eachother?

Obviously she didn't do wonders if she's making you feel this way.

I understand what Schizotypic is saying, he brings a good point to the table.

darkcornerinthecloset is the girl that deep_and_depressing is talking about.

That's why she's getting upset.

She didn't make it clear, so now we're here talking about DRAMA instead of the actual text.

Look, the poem is fine as long as you get your feelings out.
Honestly, I thought the second one was better.

The end.

Still thinking this.

idk if I can turn it into any kind of song

That poem was about a girl that doesn't exist and never will. darkcornerinthecloset makes me feel better though. ;P

Ohh. Things make much more sense now.

This was exceptionally entertaining to read... scarykidinthecloset cheer the **** up. You don't need to complain about everything. Deep and Depressing... you too.

yeahhhh, that completely went over my head... This is quite interesting. And coming out is not always easier. I did, and it created just as many problems as it solved...but at least I could face those problems as me.

hmm. do you guys mind? i would like to keep SOME of my sanity and pride!

Yeah I know it's hard but it bugs me that I can't show ANY affection to her.

Since when are YOU sane? (jk)

bitch lol jk

well, im not arguing with you people. leave me, why dont you? **** i sound really ****ing harsh. people just understand that i TOLD her too. and the **** doesnt listen

told me what exactly? Soooo lost.

that you should dump me, dude!

wow this thread just got hardcore.

this is much more intersting.

by the way i would change 'Hellbound life' with Hellbound ride. Just sounds better.

NOOOOO NEVER!!!!!

Yes, and if I did get into a relationship, I didn't want the closet to scare me from being affectionate

Chain Me Down
 

I wrote this one about darkcornerinthecloset. I got to use one of my favorite metaphors in this one.
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Explain this feeling I get inside
‘cause I was told love involved butterflies.
I’m down on my knees begging you please
to feel the same about me.
This stabbing pain fills my heart when I hide how I feel today
And I can’t even find the words to say.

[chorus] If I can’t have your love
Chain me down to the ocean floor
So I can drown and hurt no more.

You’re more beautiful than a starlit sky
At twenty past midnight.
For once I wanna fall in love
And land gently on my feet
‘cause every other time I’ve landed
Face-down in concrete.

[chorus] x2

I hide these three words I long to say
And even if you walk away
I guess I’ll love you anyway [x3]

[chorus]
Hide these three words I long to say
[chorus]
I still love you anyway.

I like the imagery and flow. There weren't any parts that seemed out of place to me.

I love the chorus, by the way. It's a very nice metaphor (I think it would be considered a metaphor).

If you use it in a song, I'd like to hear it.

By the way my favorite metaphor is the "I wanna fall in love and land gently on my feet..."

I bought a hallmark card that said that once.

My favorite metaphor is grape juice.

I don't think that is either a metaphor or a simile. It's more of a hyperbole.
...little emo children make me want to eat babies.

Do it! Do it! Do it!

You are my life's ambition
and I've been waiting for you to
save me from myself come on
there's no admission
we're both on our way to hell

that lil part stood out to me for some reason.

Lets got to HEll, but together.

Tried. Failed. Never again.

I'm not emo. I'm a perky goth.

Is it a joke song?

Let the Darkness Overcome
 

This was inspired by a book. The main character is pretty much allergic to light.
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Tears fill my eyes
as I work to surpress
building feelings of
sadness and stress.
Will myself to the shadows,
let the darkness overcome.
With any luck I won't live
to see tomarrow's sun.

[chorus]
Live in the darkness,
thrive in the night.
Never be ashamed to
shy away from the light.
Learn to love this inky black
for it has much to offer and
nothing does it lack.

Hide in the shadows,
we aren't welcome in the light.
But none of that matters if you
play your cards right.
Drink in the black of ink,
let it rush through poisoned veins.
And shrink away as the sun rises again.

[chorus]

Hide from flouresence and
harmful ultraviolet rays.
Welcome the shadowed presence
at the end of every day.
Kill the power,
throw the switch.
The light burns through me,
every inch

[chorus]

Safe in the dark
from unwanted illumination.
Hidden from the heart
of angry words and accusations.[x2]

[chorus]
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I haven't edited this one yet and I'm having some issues with the flow.

Sort of-I guess? It doesn't apply to my life anymore. I just like it-I guess?

You guys seem fine.

So I don't know what this is all about.

I think we've come to the point that the conversation is no longer about music and lyrics.

Too many new guys look at poetry and think they can get away with anything. likes its madlibs and you just plug **** in.

For example "this stabbing pain fills my heart"

first off, "fills my heart" is a cliche. These are to be avoided.

secondly, is stabbing pain a liquid? This is a rule breaker, and those are fine but you can always tell te guys whos breaking rules when he doesn't know what the rule is...or that he's even breaking one.

Things appear haphazard but they never are, and if anything points a guy out as new to the craft, thats it.