Pssh, when was it?

Just Thought You Should Know
 

I wrote this about darkcornerinthecloset, as I usually do. I haven't edited at all so it pretty much sucks so far.
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Just Thought You Should Know

Come up from behind wrap my
arms around you.
Check to see that no
harm has found you.
I'm here to protect,
forgive and forget.
Put my life on the line for you.

[chorus]
Please hold me tighter,
don't ever let go.
I need you more than ever so,
just hold me tighter,
don't ever let go.
I love you.
Just thought you should know.

I want to make you happy,
see the light in your eyes.
Brighten your world to
neon colors that surprise.
I just want to hear that your mine.
Because I'll be here for you
until the end of time.

[chorus]

I find it hard to believe,
that someone so angelic
could ever want me.
You're committment-phobic,
but I can see,
somwhere deep inside you'll
always love me.

Please hold me tighter,
don't ever let go.
I want you more than I should so,
baby hold me tighter,
don't ever let go.
I love you.
But you already know.

[chorus]
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The chorus sounds like something "We The Kings" would write. (Random observations)

Just thought you should know; as follows,
 

Awwwwwwwwwwwwww, that's sweet,:love: dark corner needs someone on their side like that.:) I like the song,:beer: I made it a punk song in my head, with a heavy english accent, like I would imagine Jackhammer having.:usehead:

Phobias
 

I just wanna say: I have some of the weirdest phobias EVER.
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Everyone has a phobia.
Everyone is scared.
And many of these little frights
make us
happiness impaired.

For many it can be
spiders,
heights,
or even blood,
that keep them from doing
the things they love.

Our phobias are different
from the rest.
But have we ever tried to fight them?
Tried to put them to the test?

Will you keep living hopeless lies,
and still be afraid to feel?
Will I keep hiding from the light,
and things that I know aren't real?

Will we ever stand up to these
nightmares that we have?
Or will we keep on being different
and pretend it makes us sad?

HOLY SH!T did you seriously just compliment MY song?????!!! that NEVER happens!!!!! (thanks):yikes:

I like the concept, but it feels like you just wrote a rhyme for children.
Maybe you could work on your delivery?
I dunno, just an idea.

I think I just witnessed internet rape.

If you are afraid of shadows why do you say you hide from light?

The combination of light and solid objects creates shadows.

no frikin duh! but you might as well say you hide from blunt objects for all the good that will do

Nice concept, but how about this...?

Everyone has a phobia.
Everyone is scared.
And many of these little frights
Make us happiness impaired.

For some it can be spiders,
Or heights,or even blood,
That hold them back from doing
All the things they love.

Our phobias are different,
Mine from all from the rest.
But have we ever tried to fight them?
Tried to put them to the test?

Will you keep living hopeless lives,
And be afraid to feel?
Will I keep on hiding from the light,
and things that I know aren't real?

Will we ever stand up to these
Nightmares that we fear?
Or will we keep on being terrified
Watch life pass, and shed a tear?

Deep and Depressing.

I got that sense, too, but a lot of kids have a lot of fears, many of which they grow out of, so it would make sense.

I really like this one better

Thank you, glad you weren't offended my my attempt to interpret your art !!! Keep it up, great imagery!

Let the Darkness Overcome
 

I've been editing this song like crazy. It was inspired by a book called "Fear Nothing" by Dean Koontz and my general phobias.
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Let the Darkness Overcome

Tears fill my eyes as
I work to supress
building feelings of
sadness and stress.
Will myself to the shadows,
let the darkness overcome.
With any luck I won't
live to see tomarrow's sun.
It's time to.

[chorus]
Live in the darkness,
thrive in the night.
Never be ashamed to
hide away from the light.

Let's hide in the shadows
for we aren't welcome here.
When you're one with the night
there's nothing left to fear.
Drink it in, black of ink rushes
through poisoned veins.
And the sun comes out again.

[chorus]
Step up,be strong.
Let the darkness overcome.

Hide from flourescence
and harmful ultraviolet rays.
Welcome shadowed presence
at the end of every day.
Kill the power, throw the switch.
The light burns like a bitch.

[chorus]
Step up, be strong.
Let the darkness overcome.

Safe in the dark from
unwanted illumination.
Hidden from the heart of
angry words and accusations.

[chorus]
Step up, be strong.
Let the darkness overcome.

Running Away
 

For once, this isn't a song. Just a poem that is both metaphorical & litteral.
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Running Away

We run on a silent wooden path,
side-by-side.

Our tired feet beat down tired dirt,
in perfect stride.

Kicking up little clouds of dust.

Left,left.
Right,right.

Perfectly timed,
speeding off into the night.

Inhale,inhale.
Exhale,exhale.

This wasn't choreographed,
or rehearsed. We just happened
to put the same foot first.

I get lost in the beat to
this music we're creating.

Our feet and over-exerting
hearts and lungs, become the
sounds of percussion and drums.

The city is nearing,
you quicken your pace.

But I'm much too tired
to follow you and run away.

I try to run faster, to catch up to you.
But there's too much dust for me to even see through.
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I know-it sucks. I'm sorry wasted all your precious time.

I dont really get it :/

kinda dull?

hmm. and why? condense your stanzas just a tad. and maybe add a bit more life into the action going on. . .theres a billion poems that compare running to struggles. . .do something to make it unique.

^Yeah, advice from one who knows.

Go live in a third world country for a while, then come back to your life now and see if you feel this way.
It's terrible. Darkcornerinthecloset will dig it though.

Your poetry seems to be getting progressively happier.

^^this is happy then what is sad

well no. . .sorry angi

I didn't say this was happy I'm saying that this is happier than most of his agsta shiz.









and I was being sarcastic.

So what are you running from?

SHE dont do happy. and your sarcams knows no bounds.

I'm sorry, I'm a bad person.
:'(

sokay we still love you. unless that was sarcasm, in which case i only do hate.

everything-specifically darkcorner's mother.

I have less **** to be depressed about.