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10-02-2005, 03:37 PM
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The Triumphant Return
Some new songs for you to read. comments, suggestions, critiques welcome.
This Time It’s Time Timing really is everything It is the purveyor of our lives Our biorhythmic standard wars are fought for time children put to the sword seems the only true escape from time is through the sword The moon is the ultimate The embodiement of time Showing us that all things pass And steals the light from our souls Begin the systematic slaughter of the faithful Now is their untimely demise Synchronize your watches With heavy hearts we fight And rage against the night Chronophagia is my corrupted exsanguation But seriously, I hate snakes Jacque This is imperative Monochromasticism is getting old Hold up the last star you saw (it’s light permeating the sickly air) by moonlight we march in awe (our silhouettes faint under heaven’s stare) I am merely immortal The damage to the bridge is critical Sound the general alarm, we’re in a dive I’ll live through this but making friends is getting difficult This is imperative Apollo’s fiery steeds have died The sun has no warmth let alone light I am merely immortal
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10-02-2005, 03:40 PM
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isfckingdead
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The first one seems metal like with the sword lines...which is uber cool yoz.i had to look up some of the words in the dictionary which is always good.I like the 'I am merely immortal' part in the second songs lotsly...haha this is probaly a useless posttt awwh well!they were good.
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10-04-2005, 07:55 PM
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Muck Fusic
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Really like the second one. It flows well, and is just beautiful to read. Especially the "Hold up the last star you saw (it’s light permeating the sickly air) by moonlight we march in awe (our silhouettes faint under heaven’s stare)" lines.
The first one I'm almost indifferent to. The "wars are fought for time children put to the sword seems the only true escape from time is through the sword" lines really confuse the **** out of me. Seems like you are trying to symbolize something, yet you have to explain it to an extent where it's not symbolism. Don't know if that makes sense to you...it's hard for me to put my finger on it.
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10-05-2005, 05:33 PM
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The first one was inspired after reading some of Buried Insides lyrics from the cd Chronoclast.
the line about putting children to the sword was a refrence to the Macebee's and how instead of surrenduring to the Roman's man, woman, and child all committed suicide. Their time had run out. yeah my symbolism is kinda hidden. and by kinda i mean very.
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10-06-2005, 06:29 PM
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I really liked the second one. I think for the common folk, like me, would need to see your symbolism a little clearer, but keep it up!
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10-06-2005, 06:42 PM
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