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Old 12-16-2005, 01:01 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Trying to clutch the desire that melts away/
grasping for my thoughts when everything else fades away/
and everyone/
they at some point know this song/
what they feel/
is an expression of self/
feeling and thinking/
is not good for your health/

When you look to God just to feel wanted/
when you think of the bad just to feel haunted/
and sometimes we sleep/
with the music and the light on/
we are scared/
in the dark of what might come/
we are fully grown/
yet we are scared of what is not known/

Darkness cloaks where the light used to shine/
that star in the sky that used to be mine/
my wishing star/
holds my mind like my body cannot/
a pensieve/
in which my dreams I slot/
we are lost inside/
my imagination say its time/
and we will go....
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Old 12-20-2005, 02:04 AM   #2 (permalink)
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quite existenstial. a pensieve? nice
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Old 12-20-2005, 10:36 AM   #3 (permalink)
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I'm sitting here trying to figure this out-do you like my song?
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Old 12-20-2005, 10:42 AM   #4 (permalink)
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I'm sitting here trying to figure this out-do you like my song?
They said nice,
so I think so, yes.
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Old 12-20-2005, 10:43 AM   #5 (permalink)
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I thought he meant nice about the pensieve line-that was all. Anyway now you've replied do you like the song?
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Old 12-20-2005, 10:52 AM   #6 (permalink)
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Aaah i've been snatched in!

grasping for my thoughts when everything else fades away/
^I think that line could be shortened slightly to keep the flow

feeling and thinking/
is not good for your health/

I like this for some reason.

But anyway all in all, i think it's pretty damn reasonable when i see it written down and a good effort.
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Old 12-20-2005, 10:55 AM   #7 (permalink)
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Old 12-20-2005, 05:57 PM   #8 (permalink)
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the song is okay. i just particularly liked the pensieve thing. mainly cause it reminded me of harry potter
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Old 12-22-2005, 01:01 AM   #9 (permalink)
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God lame, i hate songs like this, songs that try so hard to be emotional and just end up cheesy.
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Old 12-22-2005, 11:14 AM   #10 (permalink)
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This song isn't trying to be emotional-in fact it doesn't make sense. I know it doesn't make sense, I don't understand it myself. I made it to be that way. I just wanted to point out how fickle the people are on these forums. I have created some songs that weren't very good, but at least they had a meaning. This song doesn't mean anything. I created it for that reason. I wanted to point out that people will say they like a song if it SOUNDS deep and meaningful. This song is less meaningful than any other of the songs I have posted in this forum. Read it again and you try to make sense of it. If you can then you clearly know more about it than I do, the writer. The people I have come into contact with in my time here have been one of two things-helpful or total motherf*cking losers who like to spend their time thinking they are god's gift to Earth and that their opinion is the be all and end all of everything. I am telling you it is not. I know my music and know that this song isn't half as good as the other songs I have posted. Even though they were quite short and simple they had a meaning and a plot. I just thought of words that sounded deep and that rhymed and stuck them into a song, something that took me all of 3 minutes. Now for this song to get more praise than any of my other songs really shows how utterly predictable and juvenile this forum is. I am sure now I will get many people once again arguing the toss with me on this thread about how I am wrong-AGAIN. But face facts-I am right...AGAIN.
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