my poems (quote)

madeinNY · 12-29-2005, 04:17 PM

I try

But seriously...my eyes. My granpa see's better than I do.

Crazy Luv · 12-29-2005, 04:23 PM

awwww

<that expresses my reaction to what ya said

madeinNY · 12-29-2005, 04:39 PM

I'm glad someone around here appreciates my humorous effort.

sleepy jack · 12-29-2005, 04:42 PM

Quit spamming and get back on topic christ.
and after going through the poems they're decent but the rhyming is a bit off sometimes.
It aint bad though.

Crazy Luv · 12-29-2005, 08:55 PM

rhyming is a bit off, its way off cause i wasnt even rhyming at all

sleepy jack · 12-29-2005, 09:12 PM

Poems tend to rhyme its usually what makes them good, and i didn't read the whole thread, i didn't see you say you didn't wanna make it rhyme.

madeinNY · 12-29-2005, 09:13 PM

Usually its the good poems that don't rhyme...IMHO.
My mom writes some kick ass poetry, she's won awards, none of her's rhymes.

TheBig3 · 12-29-2005, 09:21 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by hobojesus

No wonder you lost your boyfriend if you gave him a dove.

lol. thats amazing. I hate you hobo, but thats good stuff.

Crazy Luv · 12-29-2005, 09:52 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Alexisonfire

Poems tend to rhyme its usually what makes them good

yes some tend to. & rhyming to me, is not what makes them good.

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i didn't read the whole thread, i didn't see you say you didn't wanna make it rhyme

okay, but where did you see me indicate that i wanted it to?

sleepy jack · 12-29-2005, 09:53 PM

I think a poem needs rhyme and or flow to sound good and after reading these they had neither, and they weren't written flowerly.

12-29-2005, 04:17 PM	#21 (permalink)
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12-29-2005, 09:13 PM	#27 (permalink)
madeinNY [[la de da diddy da]] Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: NY...duh. Posts: 444	Usually its the good poems that don't rhyme...IMHO. My mom writes some kick ass poetry, she's won awards, none of her's rhymes. __________________ I cleared out my PM box...I promise. lol

12-29-2005, 04:23 PM	#22 (permalink)
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 355	awwww <that expresses my reaction to what ya said

12-29-2005, 08:55 PM	#25 (permalink)
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 355	rhyming is a bit off, its way off cause i wasnt even rhyming at all