my song (quote)

Crazy Luv · 01-01-2006, 01:17 PM

post your other poems...if you wanna, we'll help ya

~~Sabgoat~~ · 01-01-2006, 02:55 PM

hmm.. go to my site..
www.piczo.com/junemaher

i only have a few poems on the site.. and a few songs.. i dunno what ones to post here haha..

Crazy Luv · 01-02-2006, 09:01 AM

i like

Quote:

Dream

You seen me once, then twice
You held me close, and kissed me goodnight
I fall like a angel on your door
I fall so hard I went threw the floor
I opened my eyes, and then I see
I see you and what you really mean to me
I know I should have been more clear
I know I should have seen your fears
I couldn't take the chance to let you go
I wasn't sure how to let you know
I told you what you meant to me
Now your gone, why couldn't I see
It was nothing but a dream
A guy like you, with a woman like me
I was a girl that fell apart
I was the girl that opened her heart
You were the man that held the key
You were the man that set me free

some parts confused me a lil', but i still like it.

madeinNY · 01-02-2006, 09:04 AM

Yes that one is good. Cliche, but good.

~~Sabgoat~~ · 01-02-2006, 10:07 AM

non of my stuff really makes alot of sense to anyone.. nor to me after a while but when i first write it.. it makes alot of sense. hahaha..
but out of al the stuff i wrote this doesn't make sense to you haha.. do tell???

~~Sabgoat~~ · 01-02-2006, 02:36 PM

Suicide

Its you
Its you isn't it
Its you thats doing this to me

Its you thats putting the pills in my mouth
Its you thats putting the gun to my head

STOP IT!
I don't want to die
Not yet

Then I look around me
No one is to be found

Its me
Its me isn't
Its me thats doing this

I can't stop
It won't stop

It hurts to much to let go

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now thats a old poem i wrote.. think that could ever be a ****ed up song hahahahha..

madeinNY · 01-03-2006, 06:23 AM

Once again, the poem is cliche but I find myself liking it.

Mr Sensitive · 01-03-2006, 07:14 AM

It's too angsty.

madeinNY · 01-03-2006, 07:20 AM

Is there realy such a thing as too angsty when that's the effect you're going for anyway??

I've read a lot more angsty songs, check out some Johnny Cash

Mr Sensitive · 01-03-2006, 08:19 AM

I'm just not too fond of angst, especialy teenage angst.

01-02-2006, 09:04 AM	#24 (permalink)
madeinNY [[la de da diddy da]] Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: NY...duh. Posts: 444	Yes that one is good. Cliche, but good. __________________ I cleared out my PM box...I promise. lol

01-03-2006, 06:23 AM	#27 (permalink)
madeinNY [[la de da diddy da]] Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: NY...duh. Posts: 444	Once again, the poem is cliche but I find myself liking it. __________________ I cleared out my PM box...I promise. lol

01-03-2006, 07:14 AM	#28 (permalink)
Mr Sensitive Hyperkinetic Rabbitything Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: In the Noodle Mines Posts: 811	It's too angsty. __________________

01-03-2006, 07:20 AM	#29 (permalink)
madeinNY [[la de da diddy da]] Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: NY...duh. Posts: 444	Is there realy such a thing as too angsty when that's the effect you're going for anyway?? I've read a lot more angsty songs, check out some Johnny Cash __________________ I cleared out my PM box...I promise. lol

01-03-2006, 08:19 AM	#30 (permalink)
Mr Sensitive Hyperkinetic Rabbitything Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: In the Noodle Mines Posts: 811	I'm just not too fond of angst, especialy teenage angst. __________________

01-01-2006, 01:17 PM	#21 (permalink)
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 355	post your other poems...if you wanna, we'll help ya

01-01-2006, 02:55 PM	#22 (permalink)
~~Sabgoat~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Dec 2005 Posts: 303	hmm.. go to my site.. www.piczo.com/junemaher i only have a few poems on the site.. and a few songs.. i dunno what ones to post here haha..

01-02-2006, 10:07 AM	#25 (permalink)
~~Sabgoat~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Dec 2005 Posts: 303	non of my stuff really makes alot of sense to anyone.. nor to me after a while but when i first write it.. it makes alot of sense. hahaha.. but out of al the stuff i wrote this doesn't make sense to you haha.. do tell???

01-02-2006, 02:36 PM	#26 (permalink)
~~Sabgoat~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Dec 2005 Posts: 303	Suicide Its you Its you isn't it Its you thats doing this to me Its you thats putting the pills in my mouth Its you thats putting the gun to my head STOP IT! I don't want to die Not yet Then I look around me No one is to be found Its me Its me isn't Its me thats doing this I can't stop It won't stop It hurts to much to let go ------------------------------------ now thats a old poem i wrote.. think that could ever be a ****ed up song hahahahha..