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Old 01-22-2006, 06:33 PM   #1 (permalink)
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A/N: still needs a lot of work, I think...please review.

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Iíve got a goal, hon.
ÖThatís the stupidest thing youíve ever done.
And now Iím gunna make you regret it.
Forget everything youíve known.
Iím gunna make you feel it in your bones, hon.

Itís gunna feel ten times worse
Than I did.
Know why?
ĎCause thatís the stupidest thing youíve ever done, hon.

Be a little smarter, babes.
How could I be so foolishÖ
HellÖyouíre gunna feel it in yer bones.
Forget everything you know. (Iíll laugh at you)

Iím gunna make you taste your own tears for a change.
Tie you up for a change.
Get down on your damn knees for a change, hon.

HaÖwell hon, Iíve got a goal.
Gunna make ya feel it in yer bones.
Youíre gunna regret it worse than before.
Forget everything youíve ever known.
Gunna make you feel it in your bones.

Make you feel used for a damn change.
Make you jealous.
Make you stay up all night crying.

Thatís the stupidest thing youíve ever done, hon.
Forget everything youíve ever known.
And walk the path of broken hearts and tattered souls
Youíll feel it in youíre fucking bones.
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Old 01-22-2006, 07:06 PM   #2 (permalink)
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I was confused at first, but after reading the whole thing Im like "oooo sh*t". i like what its saying. Started liking it from...
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Old 01-22-2006, 07:10 PM   #3 (permalink)
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thanks crazy :]

what do you think its saying? (just curious)...
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Old 01-22-2006, 07:19 PM   #4 (permalink)
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Okay lets say Jill was with Jack okay. Now Jack did a whole lot of stupid things. but all of a sudden he did something that was beyond the line of tolerance. Now Jill, tired of it all(mentally as well as physically), isnt going to take that sh*t & is gonna make him pay for all the trouble hes put her through.

well thats what i got from it...
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Old 01-22-2006, 07:33 PM   #5 (permalink)
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Yeshh! Very good :]
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Old 01-25-2006, 12:26 PM   #6 (permalink)
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...I did actually like this one, madein. Your best so far, even though I didn't really like any of your previous work. I like all the uses of 'hon'. Very alternative.
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Old 01-25-2006, 01:26 PM   #7 (permalink)
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why thank you hobo :]
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Old 01-28-2006, 01:39 AM   #8 (permalink)
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You're welcome and lap it up, because it is the only compliment I've dished out in a while.
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Old 01-29-2006, 06:29 PM   #9 (permalink)
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i would love to call this a terrible song

its ok i guess... monsterously cliche and i really didnt like the informality of the diction, but maybe thats just me
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Old 01-30-2006, 12:57 PM   #10 (permalink)
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The 'informality of the diction' makes the song, in my opinion. For some reason this reminds me of a slightly more 'countrified' Johnny Cash.
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