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Old 03-18-2006, 05:28 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Sit and wait, It wont be okay

The lights from the cars
Make snakes on the road
Each one passes by
In a bright frozen pose
And you are asleep
In the back of the bus
Your face lit up
By each light that we pass

You look just
Like you should

On the way home highways
Where everything looks upset
My moods are matching
The wet strips of regret
Where they lay flowers
On the side of the road
For all of the people
The concrete has stole

Iím glad you
Werenít awake

And if that would happen
The instance of light
Would carry off my sorrow
Like a bird in flight

Now I stand on the ground
With my bags lying down
And I look to see
If you are around
But youíve come and gone
Just like the sun
Sink down each day
To darken my heart

I guess itís what
I deserve

Now I drink to cover up
The tracks you have left
I tried to keep moving
But got stuck with the rest
Once you may have been
The way I am now
But the roles got reversed
And I have no idea how

But I know that itís gone
These things donít wait around
Like a ghost your heart has left
Drifting away without a sound
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Painstaking devotion and love
Surrendered to self preservation
From others who care for themselves
A blindness that touches perfection
But hurts just like anything else

Isolation, isolation, isolation
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Old 03-21-2006, 09:05 AM   #2 (permalink)
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I like these lyrics, very honest and down to earth. My only criticism would be how obvious the part about you drinking sounds and how much stronger the part about hiding tracks would be if you were talking about the kind of drugs that leave those kind of marks.
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Old 03-21-2006, 04:51 PM   #3 (permalink)
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The flow is excellent, and the drinking part is fine, changing it to drugs is overdoing it.
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