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Old 04-11-2006, 05:40 AM   #1 (permalink)
that's my war face.
 
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Default I'm thinking about it

I'm thinking bout going home
Maybe you would like to join me
A girl like you shouldn't be alone
A guy like me should get in for free
What's your price, love? Really that much?
Sorry darling I ain't got enough
Maybe we should watch TV instead
Don't worry there's a TV in my bedroom

I'm thinking bout undressing
I'll pull down your skirt love no messing
Bad girls like you should be taught a lesson
My wife will be home soon so no carressing
What, you don't want to? You don't have a choice
I'll only be 2 minutes just keep down your voice
Then you can go home and you won't say a word
Cos slappers like you, no, they don't get heard




Only 2 verses so far then, but what do you all think at the moment? Any ideas for a third verse?
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Old 04-11-2006, 11:03 AM   #2 (permalink)
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i like it. flow is nice! i haven't any ideas at the moment to help!
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Old 04-12-2006, 03:16 AM   #3 (permalink)
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i like this one too. hmph, doing a good job. but i dont like these lines in the 1st stanza...
Maybe we should watch TV instead
Don't worry there's a TV in my bedroom
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Old 04-12-2006, 03:33 AM   #4 (permalink)
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The 'room' in the bedroom line is supposed to be echoed out. It works, trust me.
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Old 04-12-2006, 03:40 AM   #5 (permalink)
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...riiiiiiiiight. well for now, unless i hear it myself, i still stick with my opinion.


well off to ****ing school, oh the joy...
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