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04-16-2006, 01:06 PM | #1 (permalink) |
a l'amou fou pou tout
Join Date: Dec 2005
Location: NY
Posts: 355
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Dont know what to do
I care too much for my own good
These emotions will be the death of me I want to ship off from Emotion Island Call me a coward if you please. I look up to the stars for what to do But the moon gets in the way of my view I want to jump over this mocking moon But I can’t shape shift into a cow. Oh the catastrophe, I want to sit down and cry oh god please I don’t know what to do with myself. Everything’s falling apart, I just want to hide away my heart I don’t know what to do with myself. I can’t bring myself to move on forward A meteor has struck down upon my feet The impact bended my limbs the wrong way Unfortunately my mind hasn’t gone a stray. If I chanced to let you see a glimpse I would grant Justin Timberlake that one wish But if I dared to let it all show I would take part in the apocalypse. {not a song} |
04-18-2006, 05:40 PM | #2 (permalink) |
Here's lookin at you, kid
Join Date: Jan 2006
Location: The White Hotel
Posts: 366
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Okay, well....the Justin Timberlake part I did not get one bit haha, do you like him or something?
Anyway, it's very straightforward...I liked what you tried to do with using metaphors with the sky and whatnot...but it's still, in my opinion, too straight. Straight forward...is what I meant...not straight. I'm not a heterophobe. HA! Anyway..just more metaphors ;] I like the general theme, though. |
04-18-2006, 05:49 PM | #3 (permalink) |
Atchin' Akai
Join Date: May 2005
Location: Unamerica
Posts: 8,723
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What is the Justin Timberlake angle?
I'm intrigued. Not to keen on this imagery either; A meteor has struck down upon my feet The impact bended my limbs the wrong way To some exotic booze...your rambling. Are you on drugs? |
04-19-2006, 01:56 AM | #6 (permalink) |
Don't think twice
Join Date: Dec 2005
Location: A basement on the hill
Posts: 352
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if its not a song, may i ask what it is? other than that some bits i enjoyed, remove the timberlake stuff tho. i like vs 1,2,4
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