Dont know what to do (bling, song)

Crazy Luv · 04-16-2006, 12:06 PM

I care too much for my own good
These emotions will be the death of me
I want to ship off from Emotion Island
Call me a coward if you please.

I look up to the stars for what to do
But the moon gets in the way of my view
I want to jump over this mocking moon
But I can’t shape shift into a cow.

Oh the catastrophe,
I want to sit down and cry oh god please
I don’t know what to do with myself.
Everything’s falling apart,
I just want to hide away my heart
I don’t know what to do with myself.

I can’t bring myself to move on forward
A meteor has struck down upon my feet
The impact bended my limbs the wrong way
Unfortunately my mind hasn’t gone a stray.

If I chanced to let you see a glimpse
I would grant Justin Timberlake that one wish
But if I dared to let it all show
I would take part in the apocalypse.

{not a song}

Mama Booze · 04-18-2006, 04:40 PM

Okay, well....the Justin Timberlake part I did not get one bit haha, do you like him or something?

Anyway, it's very straightforward...I liked what you tried to do with using metaphors with the sky and whatnot...but it's still, in my opinion, too straight.

Straight forward...is what I meant...not straight. I'm not a heterophobe.

HA!

Anyway..just more metaphors ;] I like the general theme, though.

right-track · 04-18-2006, 04:49 PM

What is the Justin Timberlake angle?
I'm intrigued.

Not to keen on this imagery either;

A meteor has struck down upon my feet
The impact bended my limbs the wrong way

To some exotic booze...your rambling. Are you on drugs?

Mama Booze · 04-18-2006, 05:57 PM

I don't know.
I'm on diet coke...hA!

Crazy Luv · 04-18-2006, 07:05 PM

Do you know Justin Timberlake's Cry me a river?...

For now, i want it to be straightforward

either/or · 04-19-2006, 12:56 AM

if its not a song, may i ask what it is? other than that some bits i enjoyed, remove the timberlake stuff tho. i like vs 1,2,4

Crazy Luv · 04-19-2006, 02:02 PM

a poem

yes, im working on the Justin Timberlake part, no worries.

Thanks for the comments.

04-16-2006, 12:06 PM	#1 (permalink)
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 355	Dont know what to do I care too much for my own good These emotions will be the death of me I want to ship off from Emotion Island Call me a coward if you please. I look up to the stars for what to do But the moon gets in the way of my view I want to jump over this mocking moon But I can’t shape shift into a cow. Oh the catastrophe, I want to sit down and cry oh god please I don’t know what to do with myself. Everything’s falling apart, I just want to hide away my heart I don’t know what to do with myself. I can’t bring myself to move on forward A meteor has struck down upon my feet The impact bended my limbs the wrong way Unfortunately my mind hasn’t gone a stray. If I chanced to let you see a glimpse I would grant Justin Timberlake that one wish But if I dared to let it all show I would take part in the apocalypse. {not a song}

04-19-2006, 12:56 AM	#6 (permalink)
either/or Don't think twice Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: A basement on the hill Posts: 352	if its not a song, may i ask what it is? other than that some bits i enjoyed, remove the timberlake stuff tho. i like vs 1,2,4 __________________ Painstaking devotion and love Surrendered to self preservation From others who care for themselves A blindness that touches perfection But hurts just like anything else Isolation, isolation, isolation

04-18-2006, 04:40 PM	#2 (permalink)
Mama Booze Here's lookin at you, kid Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: The White Hotel Posts: 366	Okay, well....the Justin Timberlake part I did not get one bit haha, do you like him or something? Anyway, it's very straightforward...I liked what you tried to do with using metaphors with the sky and whatnot...but it's still, in my opinion, too straight. Straight forward...is what I meant...not straight. I'm not a heterophobe. HA! Anyway..just more metaphors ;] I like the general theme, though.

04-18-2006, 04:49 PM	#3 (permalink)
right-track Atchin' Akai Join Date: May 2005 Location: Unamerica Posts: 8,723	What is the Justin Timberlake angle? I'm intrigued. Not to keen on this imagery either; A meteor has struck down upon my feet The impact bended my limbs the wrong way To some exotic booze...your rambling. Are you on drugs?

04-18-2006, 05:57 PM	#4 (permalink)
Mama Booze Here's lookin at you, kid Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: The White Hotel Posts: 366	I don't know. I'm on diet coke...hA!

04-18-2006, 07:05 PM	#5 (permalink)
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 355	Do you know Justin Timberlake's Cry me a river?... For now, i want it to be straightforward

04-19-2006, 02:02 PM	#7 (permalink)
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 355	a poem yes, im working on the Justin Timberlake part, no worries. Thanks for the comments.