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Old 05-18-2006, 10:48 AM   #1 (permalink)
that's my war face.
 
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Default Adolessence scented Girl

I wish I could say (I love you)
But I never knew (what love meant)
So I kept it locked up (safely)
please don't charm it out

Keep it in your heart of hearts
Fixing the pieces as they fall apart
Desperation clutches at my strings
as her fingers steal all of my things
Keep it away from useless eyes
the kind of faces that we despise
and if they ask you to show them you say no
it's not their place, not their place to go...

Loving the girl (is harder)
when you're watched by the world (closely)
We are all so young (and fragile)
Give it some time (a short while)

Keep it in your heart of hearts
Fixing the pieces as they fall apart
Desperation clutches at my strings
as her fingers steal all of my things
Keep it away from useless eyes
the kind of faces that we despise
and if they ask you to show them you say no
it's not their place, not their place to go...



Well this is a very original song I invented while getting myself a drink today.(random singing Crowquill, a personal hobby of mine)
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Old 05-18-2006, 12:10 PM   #2 (permalink)
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w00 w00 random singing! The only part I don't like is the "strings" then "things", it sounds really forced. I'm don't like this one as much as your other stuff though.
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Old 05-18-2006, 12:11 PM   #3 (permalink)
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That does sound forced when read, but when sung it fits in. Out of 10? I keep forgetting to put polls up...
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Old 05-18-2006, 12:12 PM   #4 (permalink)
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Old 05-18-2006, 12:16 PM   #5 (permalink)
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Ah alright, not to good then. I'm trying to progress down the original road, and I am now constantly trying to reinvent my writing style. Eventually I'll find my niche.
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