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Old 07-07-2006, 11:58 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Default 2 Untitled Songs

(1)
Verse 1
The road is so far and long forgotten.
In the dark of small hours it’s cool and calm.
Creeping on so haunting comes a foggy haze,
Headlights piercing these ghosts as we drive along.

Chorus
Tonight I felt a memory,
And I wanted only you.
I was lost inside my mind,
When this memory came true.
With fog and smoke on this night,
My feelings just intensified,
But as I looked around,
I had realized what I’d found,
Nothing great, just a memory profound…

Verse 2
The music is capturing the moment.
Your beauty’s so taunting while seated near me,
Being so close to you deepens my feelings,
In the music filled silence between us.

(Chorus)

Bridge
In the thrill of anxiety,
Fear springs up from within.
I know this can’t be right.
This strange immense feeling,
While my heart’s set affright,
I’m breathing harder now.
Desperate now to stop all this,
my mind bursts into screams of warning,
But why are my vocal chords bound?

(Chorus)

End
Suddenly now, I look around,
The music calmly plays.
Were silent still, the fog now fades,
I guess it was only a memory…



(2)
[ ] =scream




Verse
Anger comes on; I must have done something wrong…
Your head storms in rage,
But your heart beat’s controlled within your chest.
Anger rising, close to peak,
Sharp exhale, inhale deep,
Fists are tightening while teeth stiffen in clench.
[The back of my neck now chilled by your sharp breaths,
I know the pulsing rhythm of your anger.]

Chorus
You lost control, something you could never sense.
I can’t find hope, some way to stop this,
And not ever harm you; I can’t let me hurt you,
Why won’t I let myself hurt you now?

Verse
[You never give up; you’ll make sure that I pay…
You’re my question unanswered, untouchable.]

(Chorus)

Verse
Carried on reels of film, a show of uneasy life behind bright eyes of beauty.
Inside and out, your figure is shadowed with a case of punished emotions.
Held down by your hands and quivering arms, the pain I pass by,
Under the anger, I know you’re my savior.
Each day I find my love for you growing stronger,
You’re becoming the blood in me and the air I breathe,
Soon I won’t be able to go on without you.

(Chorus)

Outro
[You’ll always hurt me, I’ll never touch you.]
I know you don’t know,
But you stop me from doing a lot of stupid things,
Just because I love you.


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Old 07-11-2006, 07:49 PM   #2 (permalink)
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I'm pretty touched by those 2 songs, well I realize they don't have titles but I've see the titles in them right under ur nose lol the second song remind me my past with my Ex gf however it's bring me good memories about it and i was once enraged like that when I knew what mistake of mine r fatal and begging my Ex to come back..... T_T by the way ur first song, it's detailed is a bit relavant to mine simply about memories too but mine is "a person without memories" and "Oblivion" and don't copy it ok??? lol but i think ur first should be entitle as "it was only a memory" or "Tonight I've felt a memory" and don't forget to add " 've" for "tonight I felt a memory" it's in the past, not present tho.... for the second song it's a hard for a topic but i understand completely..... maybe "losing Controls"? and it's good anyway lol =)
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Old 07-11-2006, 09:20 PM   #3 (permalink)
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Hey Thanx =]
I titled the first one with ur idea "Tonight I've Felt A Memory"
and the other one i decided to call "Uncontrolled and Untouchable"
thanx 4 tha comments on my 2 topics, i dont get may replies in this forum. lol
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Old 07-11-2006, 09:56 PM   #4 (permalink)
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well just sometime u do and sometime u don't lol beside is most of ur Lyrics r (Dark, Despair, Sorrow,Hatred, etc)???
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Old 07-12-2006, 07:46 PM   #5 (permalink)
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are most of my lyrics dark, and hateful?
no. wats so dark and hatefull and sad about these 2?
just a memory. and sum1 else being angry.
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Old 07-12-2006, 08:03 PM   #6 (permalink)
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well it's just kinda look like it... that's all
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