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Old 09-10-2006, 05:07 AM   #1 (permalink)
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The screams of the damned, it's all you can here
It's a noise that causes insanity.
As the shredding darkness closes in, all you can do is leer
That's what failed humanity.
But theres a special task, atonement
It will help you seek for salvage
If a lost priority can save you from ruin
What could a precious one do?

The hearts you've harmed, the damage done
It can all be swept away.
A treasonable act, a life perished.
This is what it's meant to heal!
A simple task can save your mind, it will save you from corruption...
Corruption... Demised (x2)


This is all I have, it may seem really Christiany but I didn't mean for it to be lol
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Old 09-20-2006, 10:52 PM   #2 (permalink)
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The only real thing I don't like are the first and third lines.
Or I could just not be getting the timing at all, but I'd change the first and third line up.
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Old 09-20-2006, 11:10 PM   #3 (permalink)
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i just watched hostel and for some reason this song reminds me of it.
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A blindness that touches perfection
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