TrampInaTux

(Left behind no kids
Left behind no wife
Another tabloid child
Too cool for life)

Unbutton your blazer
for there's no school today
clothes instead of books in your bag
and she's on her way
Tidy up your room
where else will you lie?
She needn't know you tried
To impress her
Just want to undress her

I stand in my own line
Stand in my own line from today

Hide it all beneath your mattress
"Who will look there?" You ask yourself
Such a young age oh it's such a cruel day
To be leading your life this way
But what needs to be will be

I stand in my own line
Stand in my own line from today
I stand in my own line
Stand in my own line from today
And the voices they all say

"Think about it before you do something stupid
this ain't love, no valentine or cupid
this ain't love, no this ain't love, so what are you doing it for?"

But I stand in my own line (don't I?)
Stand in my own line (or at least I think I do)
Stand in my own line
and in my own line

I'm in love with you



Quite a lot of songs I've wrote up here within the last few days... well here's another one... I quite like this one aswell, so comments will be appreciated as per usual.

enemyat_thesix

I like the 'standing-in-my-own-line' image, though the subject matter is a bit unoriginal: boy sleeping around because he feels empty inside; mistaking sex for love. Something along those lines, anyway.

I also don't understand the opening stanza, at all. It doesn't seem to fit in with the rest of the lyrics.

To end on a good note, however, I really like this part:

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sleepy jack

It seems kind of weaker then your other stuff, like wording wise but the message is good, i'd like the ending it was a nice way to tie it up.

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Crowe

Yeeeah, like Crow said... it's weak but I want it to get stronger... I like stories a lot and I feel like I'm getting screwed out of a good story here.

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