Jesus Is Not An Icon For Murder (Religious, Computer)

PaperHurricanesAndPlanes · 02-21-2007, 10:56 PM

Religious wars are bullshiz.

Jesus Is Not An Icon For Murder

He walks along the sand,
And with a swish of the hand,
Those once blind, now see.
Those once hungry, now fed.

If he were here today, he would not applaud.
If he were here today, he would pray for peace.

I wonder if he were here if he would
Touch the blood on the ground
And it would seep back into it’s owner’s body
The murdered alive again, peace endure.

Spilling blood was not the way of Christ,
Even an atheist knows that.

Jesus is not an icon for murder,
And he never will be.

ZeppelinAir · 02-22-2007, 08:18 PM

i didnt like, to me it didnt flow to well and just the verses and chorus dont seem to work togather well......good topic though

PaperHurricanesAndPlanes · 02-22-2007, 08:19 PM

Yeah. I had a better one before my computer crash, this was just a quick redo.

ZeppelinAir · 02-22-2007, 08:21 PM

it wasnt bad for a quick redo, its hard to remeber every word and line. bet you lost quite a bit when your computer crashed

Kevorkian Logic · 02-23-2007, 07:14 AM

It like that idea, it's a good one.

But your ending sorta fell apart in my opinion, it didn't have that same flow in the beginning. That might have to do with your computer crashing.

02-22-2007, 08:18 PM	#2 (permalink)
ZeppelinAir Long time no see Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: somewhere in Michigan Posts: 512	i didnt like, to me it didnt flow to well and just the verses and chorus dont seem to work togather well......good topic though __________________ not that old signature

02-22-2007, 08:21 PM	#4 (permalink)
ZeppelinAir Long time no see Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: somewhere in Michigan Posts: 512	it wasnt bad for a quick redo, its hard to remeber every word and line. bet you lost quite a bit when your computer crashed __________________ not that old signature

02-23-2007, 07:14 AM	#5 (permalink)
Kevorkian Logic Imperfectly Perfect Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: North Carolina Posts: 1,290	It like that idea, it's a good one. But your ending sorta fell apart in my opinion, it didn't have that same flow in the beginning. That might have to do with your computer crashing. __________________ "it is only through a limitless accumulation of the imperfect that a certain type of perfection can be attained"