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Old 03-03-2007, 07:05 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Lost in the Voices

Lesly says she’s dying
On the bathroom floor she’s sobbing
Her composure is hanging by a thread
The voices in her head, the voices in her head
She can’t get them to go
Although she’s pleads and begs with them to leave her be
Insanity is all she sees

She’s vanishing before her eyes
Lesly is melting away
There’s no one there to comfort her
And they just don’t comprehend
That malevolence has grabbed her heart and soul
It’s been too much of a wavering road


Lesly wants to fade away
She forgot who she used to be
There is someone else inside her
Playing tricks within her head

The agony is too much for her to endure
She can't make sense anymore
Her reasoning is twisted and contorted


Lesly guards the polished knife ever so closely
All she wants to do is go
She silent scream of anguish
As the stream of blood flows
She listens for a moment
All that she hears
Is the peaceful sound of silence
Echoing through her tears

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Old 03-03-2007, 09:14 PM   #2 (permalink)
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this is alright, it made me think of depression and suicide, but mostly death at the end

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Echoing through her tears
It made me think of how most people don't want to consider the thought of death. I know you're agnostic, and I don't knock it, but it seems like the most sobering thought to believe one day you completely cease to exist in mind and spirit, and I'm not ruling it out as a possibility. For me, it made me think about how at the moment of death (apologize if I'm creeping anyone out) maybe your spirit-mind does just lapse into this sort of state of transcendent peace, and it remains in that blissful state forever.
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Old 03-04-2007, 03:41 AM   #3 (permalink)
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its very good.
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Old 03-04-2007, 04:51 PM   #4 (permalink)
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the last verse is the best in my opinion, overall though its good
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Old 03-04-2007, 07:38 PM   #5 (permalink)
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this is alright, it made me think of depression and suicide, but mostly death at the end



It made me think of how most people don't want to consider the thought of death. I know you're agnostic, and I don't knock it, but it seems like the most sobering thought to believe one day you completely cease to exist in mind and spirit, and I'm not ruling it out as a possibility. For me, it made me think about how at the moment of death (apologize if I'm creeping anyone out) maybe your spirit-mind does just lapse into this sort of state of transcendent peace, and it remains in that blissful state forever.
It's about manic depression. It's darker than I usually write, so I wasn't sure how well I could pull it off. Dark and brooding isn't really my forte.

But the last verse, I was trying to get the feeling that this is one of those rare times where everything is connected and you are at peace.
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Old 03-04-2007, 07:41 PM   #6 (permalink)
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Is it just me, or have you gotten prolific all of the sudden?
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Old 03-04-2007, 07:50 PM   #7 (permalink)
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I wanna be prolific *cuts and listens to Evanescence* Lol.
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Old 03-04-2007, 07:55 PM   #8 (permalink)
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Is it just me, or have you gotten prolific all of the sudden?
In the poems or the comments?
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Poems.
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Old 03-04-2007, 08:00 PM   #10 (permalink)
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All the poems (except the Mary one) were all written about 4 weeks ago when I was in a interesting place in my life. Did I post them too soon in succession?
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