She Crowes Like A Cat

PaperHurricanesAndPlanes · 03-08-2007, 01:40 AM

You know what'd be great? If everywhere I post you didn't try to put me down. Lol. I mean, it's not that you're succeeding, but your posts are a waste of fucking time. Lol.

03-08-2007, 02:20 AM

guys guys lets just write ill use spell check
and just try to actually read the writings
all of them if you can
we shoud try to make each other positive
constructive criticism not harmful indangerment
ps where in the hell is the spell check deal im not downloading it
peace love music

A_Perfect_Sonnet · 03-08-2007, 09:19 AM

This thread is a waste of the internet.

PaperHurricanesAndPlanes · 03-08-2007, 05:25 PM

ROFL. Pwned.

jibber · 03-08-2007, 10:05 PM

theusedtoolguy, stop being such a tool, honestly, if you're going to go out of your way to insult members, at least make it relevant to the thread topic and not be so much of a bullsh*t waste of space post as the one you posted.

theraconteur21, props on cleaning up the spelling and grammer, this way it's not distracting and people can concentrate on the actual poem. Is IS VERY important to do this, because if you can't even take the time to make your poems and songs follow propper gramatical structure, none of us are going to want to take the time to critique it. As for the poem itself, there's some continuity issues here. What I mean by that, is that you've used a lot of different metaphors and analogies, so the point ends up being muddled in all of this. Simplify it by finding one analogy for the ENTIRE song.

03-09-2007, 02:16 AM

well see i did
but because we cant relate you might not understand
its just about a girl who dosnt care to be with the one she loves
just because shes a bird dosnt mean shes a cat
NO spell check SRY

03-08-2007, 10:05 PM	#5 (permalink)
jibber Freeskier Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: Istanbul was Constantinople now it's Istanbul not Constantinople... Posts: 1,544	theusedtoolguy, stop being such a tool, honestly, if you're going to go out of your way to insult members, at least make it relevant to the thread topic and not be so much of a bullsh*t waste of space post as the one you posted. theraconteur21, props on cleaning up the spelling and grammer, this way it's not distracting and people can concentrate on the actual poem. Is IS VERY important to do this, because if you can't even take the time to make your poems and songs follow propper gramatical structure, none of us are going to want to take the time to critique it. As for the poem itself, there's some continuity issues here. What I mean by that, is that you've used a lot of different metaphors and analogies, so the point ends up being muddled in all of this. Simplify it by finding one analogy for the ENTIRE song. __________________ What you've done becomes the judge of what you're going to do -- especially in other people's minds. When you're traveling, you are what you are right there and then. People don't have your past to hold against you. No yesterdays on the road. William Least Heat Moon, Blue Highways Your toughest competitor lives in your head. Some days his name is fear, or pain, or gravity. Stomp his ass. HOOKED ON THE WHITE POWDER

03-08-2007, 02:20 AM	#2 (permalink)
THERACONTEUR21 Guest Posts: n/a	guys guys lets just write ill use spell check and just try to actually read the writings all of them if you can we shoud try to make each other positive constructive criticism not harmful indangerment ps where in the hell is the spell check deal im not downloading it peace love music

03-08-2007, 09:19 AM	#3 (permalink)
A_Perfect_Sonnet Dinosaurus Rex!!! Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: Winchester, VA Posts: 885	This thread is a waste of the internet.

03-09-2007, 02:16 AM	#6 (permalink)
THERACONTEUR21 Guest Posts: n/a	well see i did but because we cant relate you might not understand its just about a girl who dosnt care to be with the one she loves just because shes a bird dosnt mean shes a cat NO spell check SRY