Haiku Contest
 

Some dimiss haikus due to their brevity, but in actuality they are one of the most difficult structures to write in: you have seventeen syllables to paint a picture that will last--haikus are generally focused on physical images, rather than abstract ideas or symbols.

To appreciate this powerful medium of prose: a contest! Keep them serious, please; and feel free to critique, though I'd prefer entries over criticisms. Make sure to give them names: after a sufficient number have been posted, we can make a poll to decide the 'best' haiku--one entry per user, please.

Here's my entry, which I wrote for a poetry project not too long ago:

The City Slumbers

The city slumbers
unaware of the thunder
on the horizon.

na na na na na
na na na na na na na
na na na bat-man!

I <3 long titles, especially when they have the same amount of syllables as the piece itself.

To Pirouette Again Under the Curious Gaze of the Watcher

On a silver sheet
We danced in a figure eight
As we kissed through glass.

Bump, cmon!

Postcards Push
There is a staleness
in the air, below my feet
the wind won't blow here


I did it cause ethan told me to.

(Last line is four syllables.)

I made a few

MDL
We had the cosmos
But sold it for secrecy
Enjoy your future

Sleep
As I shut my eyes
Under the moonlit night sky
You shine on, my star

Sorry
Light pitter-patter
Soothing rain upon our house
The cake is ruined

Vitamins
I had me a grape
I had me another grape
Major pukage

The ironic twist of fate on a slippery road
Just for once I would
like to get to know you too
Car crash ruined it
Blah.

do tanaka count, ie 31 sylibles 57577 pattern? if so i have some to post up here to, if not i'll post then in a set of haiku instead.

right now a haiku:

sleep amoung the stars
come to me my love
let us frolic in the feilds
and fall among the blooms

I believe the term is 'tanka'; and sure, that's a variant form of haiku; go for it.

We dream to the singing of the wolves.

Stars rest on barrens,
While wolves sing their lullabies,
The cries. Oh so sweet.

hehe sorry about that, same thing different regional dialect....

and i'm abit of a traditionalist with my japanese poetry....

and now i complete the one from earlier:

sleep among the stars
come to me my love
lets us frolic among the fields
and fall among the blooms
we love among the twillight
and sleep among the stars

Plum blossoms
eprimeral plum
blossoms, scattered in the night
who has walked thru my
garden, at this midnight hour
my lovers softest steps

Flowers in the night
sleep among the stars
dream the eprimeral dreams
journey thru the night
in the nocturnal garden
in the flowers if the night

C'mon guys, lets get more entries, or get the polls goin.

yeah i posted mine, it not that hard to write them come on peoples write more

The Life Of A Student
Today I woke up
Ate a slice of stale pizza
Then went back to sleep

The Cigarette Salesman

Set your lungs alight
Get some wrinkles and cancer
Just four quid per pack

Mugging is Poetry

"Give me your money.
And take off your nice shoes too"
"Ok, don't hit me"

Recurring Dilemma

Tequila tastes ****
A bit like distilled vomit
Why do I drink it?

On The Subject of Love

I love Kelly Brooke
Dull personality, BUT
She looks good naked

This should be a 'Haiku Battles' thread.

Splitsecond Lobotomy Like A Lyrical Samurai

Got substance and style
The substance is TNT
The style, haiku


(****ing hell, Haiku battles would be lame. LETS DO IT!)

The cow hopped the moon,
"Why?" is what you ask,
Because he just did.

Shh snow is falling,
Freezing the sled, left outside,
Yes, It's cold, we know.

Not Been To Harborne Baths Yet But I Know What To Expect

Local swimming pool
Chlorine stings my eyes and throat
Fat biddies slowly float by

Mmmmmm

Clink of knife on plate
Cumberland pie, peas, gravy
Thus went my dinner

lol... dont ask
 

the world is dark
what a dark world
oooh look a light.

"Too Much Info"

Ethan called me up,
He told me that he has been
Having sex with boys.

Bravo ^

The Formula For A Great Night Out

There, on dark dancefloor
I saw girls kiss other girls
That's why *** clubs rule

Tonight the big match,
yet strangely nerveless...
Stella times six perhaps?

Hello To The Weymouth Beach Tramp

Kick your flea-bite dog
And raise that bottle to those
Vomit crusted lips

The Truth

Right-Track is a girl
Right-Track is a big girl's blouse
Right-Track plays with dolls

Goodbye to the Weymouth Beach Tramp.

While intoxicated by the grog,
the vomit stained tramp,
asphyxiates on Tom’s knob.

The Myth

DRMO is straight… fo sho! *
For show, his poetry,
mocks those who know!

*denotes heavy sarcasm.

Thomas is rubber,
And you are glue what you say,
Sticks back on to you.


=D

That One Sucked Because It Wasn't Even A Haiku

Five, seven and five
Strict Haikus or sling your hook
No more free-form jive

What! No free-form avant-garde Haiku jive?

Haiku in a word...
is deconstructionalism.
Dressed up like a turd!

By Way Of Conversation

I don't understand.
Haiku... deconstrucionalist?
Please explain, Right Track.

Stop being an elitist Haiku purist...cut me some slack here. :(