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Old 03-22-2007, 08:07 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Default Le jugement tombe sur chaque couronne

What I once held as celebrated truth
I now recognize as the vice of youth.
In an infinite moment separated by synapse
I choke on the answer to a question I never asked.
These circuits were never meant to carry such a current,
And when the breakers blow I am left with a single image:
A collapsing smile in the absence of light.

Where were you when Jericho fell,
When Sodom burned and Egypt wept?
I was here all along,
A whisper crushed between folded hands.

Behold, mighty king,
Your alabaster pillars crumbling.
Harken, O lord,
To the thunder of the dead.
Despair, your majesty,
As the black ocean swells,
Swallowing your palace and your heaven and your hell.
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Old 03-23-2007, 04:22 PM   #2 (permalink)
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It would sound better if it was just your heaven, your hell.
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Old 03-23-2007, 10:28 PM   #3 (permalink)
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But it is way more cliche that way.
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Old 03-23-2007, 11:13 PM   #4 (permalink)
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the extra 'and' is necessary for the meter.
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Old 01-13-2008, 01:05 AM   #5 (permalink)
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I hate bringing up old pieces, but this is the bomb. I love this piece. Props EATS.
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Old 01-13-2008, 07:48 PM   #6 (permalink)
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the first poem ive read on here that ive actually enjoyed it was great
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Old 01-13-2008, 08:16 PM   #7 (permalink)
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I think it's good but I think it could flow better
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Old 01-13-2008, 08:22 PM   #8 (permalink)
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Giving a piece written in English a French title is pretty pretentious, it's also starting to become cliche. I've seen it done several times before.
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Ah, yeah. I used to do them in Latin.
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