Inspired by Joanna Newsom, a love that's finished and nothing new around the corner. (songs, Hang)

TrampInaTux · 07-22-2007, 10:54 AM

There is advice that we all must take,
before we explore the very thing we create
and there is no greater fuel
than the thought of summer nights spent with you
Plates with two forks, and cold drinks with two straws
We explode like fireworks but always try,
try once more
Everything has changed, where do we begin?
in our youth we can sing our songs
and not really mean them
It's all by the by, but this smile is something else
I s'pose that our downfall is when we think about ourselves
but how can I not, when I'm so comfy
and in delight
we build our bridges as much on hope as we do fright
so this is our day, and I'll make it last for years
til those bridges we're standing on disappear
and the waves we've never known, grow and grow.
I'll grab your hand and we'll forget about this clock
the one that forces us to think about things a lot
I'll grab your hand and we'll just defy that clock
I'll hold your hand until you tell me I should stop.

sleepy jack · 07-25-2007, 12:30 AM

My two problems with it were this, comfy should be change for comfortable it wouldn't change the flow and would continue with the level of maturity the rest of the piece has. I'd also find something to replace a lot, it also seems kind of clumsy compared to the rest of the piece. Other then that this is great one of my favorites by you.

07-22-2007, 10:54 AM	#1 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	Inspired by Joanna Newsom, a love that's finished and nothing new around the corner. There is advice that we all must take, before we explore the very thing we create and there is no greater fuel than the thought of summer nights spent with you Plates with two forks, and cold drinks with two straws We explode like fireworks but always try, try once more Everything has changed, where do we begin? in our youth we can sing our songs and not really mean them It's all by the by, but this smile is something else I s'pose that our downfall is when we think about ourselves but how can I not, when I'm so comfy and in delight we build our bridges as much on hope as we do fright so this is our day, and I'll make it last for years til those bridges we're standing on disappear and the waves we've never known, grow and grow. I'll grab your hand and we'll forget about this clock the one that forces us to think about things a lot I'll grab your hand and we'll just defy that clock I'll hold your hand until you tell me I should stop.