On the Right Track (lyrics, Kiss, title, solo, quote)

~~ZiggyHappy~~ · 01-06-2008, 03:53 PM

On the right track
cause brains is what he lack
on the right track
cause he his such a hack

I'm everywhere
going to run this place to hell
right track is a douche
oh well oh well

right-track · 01-06-2008, 03:54 PM

Too many rhymes in the first bit...bad.
Hell and well...tut tut

2/10

~~Sugar Kiss~~ · 01-06-2008, 03:58 PM

I wonder if that poem is about you right track. I mean thats your name and you are a douche

right-track · 01-06-2008, 04:00 PM

I'm flattered.

sleepy jack · 01-06-2008, 04:03 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Sugar Kiss

I wonder if that poem is about you right track. I mean thats your name and you are a douche

Sugar kiss
Its face looks like a jar of piss
Why rhymes with piss and kiss?
Oh how about this
The jizz coming from your father
Last night in joy when he made you scream and holler

lucylamppost · 01-06-2008, 04:31 PM

I could see this only working if you kind of did it like circa Survive vibe and filled it in with some awesome solos and more lyrics what you have could be the chores . Keep working on it champ.

TheCaster · 01-07-2008, 11:26 AM

it sounds like a 6 year old wroteit..

Mockingbird! · 01-07-2008, 06:20 PM

maybe a smart 6 year old

swim · 01-07-2008, 07:23 PM

I got lullable visual images from this thread title.

01-06-2008, 03:53 PM	#1 (permalink)
~~ZiggyHappy~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Jan 2008 Posts: 1	On the Right Track On the right track cause brains is what he lack on the right track cause he his such a hack I'm everywhere going to run this place to hell right track is a douche oh well oh well

01-06-2008, 04:31 PM	#6 (permalink)
lucylamppost I'm a figure of forgotten Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: canada Posts: 349	I could see this only working if you kind of did it like circa Survive vibe and filled it in with some awesome solos and more lyrics what you have could be the chores . Keep working on it champ. __________________

01-07-2008, 11:26 AM	#7 (permalink)
TheCaster Music Rapist Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: Somewhere in the U.S Posts: 400	it sounds like a 6 year old wroteit.. __________________ A soul in tension thats learning to fly Condition grounded but determined to try Cant keep my eyes from the circling skies Tongue-tied and twisted just an earth-bound misfit

01-07-2008, 06:20 PM	#8 (permalink)
Mockingbird! Music Addict Join Date: Jan 2008 Posts: 58	maybe a smart 6 year old __________________ Is it cruel or kind Not too speak my mind And to lie to you Rather than hurt you? For after several large gins He'll confess all of his sins But still he'll hide from you Hide what's inside from you

01-07-2008, 07:23 PM	#9 (permalink)
swim dontcareaboutyou Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: North Carolina Posts: 5,188	I got lullable visual images from this thread title. __________________ http://nakednaps.bandcamp.com/

01-06-2008, 03:54 PM	#2 (permalink)
right-track Atchin' Akai Join Date: May 2005 Location: Unamerica Posts: 8,723	Too many rhymes in the first bit...bad. Hell and well...tut tut 2/10

01-06-2008, 03:58 PM	#3 (permalink)
~~Sugar Kiss~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Jan 2008 Posts: 1	I wonder if that poem is about you right track. I mean thats your name and you are a douche

01-06-2008, 04:00 PM	#4 (permalink)
right-track Atchin' Akai Join Date: May 2005 Location: Unamerica Posts: 8,723	I'm flattered.