|01-06-2008, 05:03 PM||#5 (permalink)|
Join Date: Nov 2004
Its face looks like a jar of piss
Why rhymes with piss and kiss?
Oh how about this
The jizz coming from your father
Last night in joy when he made you scream and holler
|01-06-2008, 05:31 PM||#6 (permalink)|
I'm a figure of forgotten
Join Date: Dec 2007
I could see this only working if you kind of did it like circa Survive vibe and filled it in with some awesome solos and more lyrics what you have could be the chores . Keep working on it champ.
|01-07-2008, 12:26 PM||#7 (permalink)|
Join Date: Nov 2007
Location: Somewhere in the U.S
it sounds like a 6 year old wroteit..
A soul in tension thats learning to fly
Condition grounded but determined to try
Cant keep my eyes from the circling skies
Tongue-tied and twisted just an earth-bound misfit
|01-07-2008, 07:20 PM||#8 (permalink)|
Join Date: Jan 2008
maybe a smart 6 year old
Is it cruel or kind
Not too speak my mind
And to lie to you
Rather than hurt you?
For after several large gins
He'll confess all of his sins
But still he'll hide from you
Hide what's inside from you