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Old 02-11-2008, 11:44 PM   #1 (permalink)
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i would like to see what people think about this song my friend wrote it ad she doesnt believe me when i tell her its pretty good. so i told her i would prove it to her.



I understand how you feel
I understand your point of view
I understand why you made your decision.

CHORUS:
I've listened to your reasons
I've heard the words you spoke
And now i've made my decision
That its time for me to go
I need to pave my own road
I gotta make my own mistakes
You've gotta let me go
It's time to let me go


I want you to know
You have my love and respect
I hope you know i'll always miss you
And that i dont wanna hurt you
But i gotta do whats right for me

Repeat chorus

I know you dont want to
but im begging you please
I need to live my own life
I want to make my own choices
I need you to understand

repeat chorus

Its time to let me go
just let me go
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Old 02-12-2008, 03:51 AM   #2 (permalink)
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I've moved it here for others to critique.
Tell 'your friend' she is welcome to post her songs here in this forum.
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Old 02-12-2008, 06:46 PM   #3 (permalink)
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It's okay...it's lacking a little expansive use of the language but it wasn't bad,
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