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Old 06-28-2008, 06:51 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Default Please Review This Song Let Me Know. Its Called:Blood Filled Tears

Verse1
Entombed again behind my fears
a silent vengeance burns inside
my pain reflected in my blood filled tears
spilled over memories of wasted years

Bridge
i can see deep inside
inside my blood filled tears
the faces of the dead
burned into my head

Chorus
everytime i close my eyes
i wait for the sun to rise
as i lay down my head
i wait for the end

Verse2
trapped in these chains i cant break free
my hopes lie dying on the ground
my blood all around me
these walls will be the last thing i see
Bridge repeat

breakdown
FALLING INSIDE
TO MY ETERNAL DEMISE
SUFFERING FOR YOUR WRONGS
SUFFERING FOR YOUR LIES

Bridge repeat

Chorus repeat

If You Have A Better Name Let Me Know Aswel
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Old 07-01-2008, 03:17 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Well I liked this(:my only thing is how the song is going to sound and be presented because i could see this going in the direction of being exactly like everything else.
good lyrics though.
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Old 07-01-2008, 03:28 PM   #3 (permalink)
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I really like the feeling of it. It's awesome in it's expressiveness and conciseness. I'm not a fan of emo/ hardcore lyrics, which I think this is. I think your work is great but it seems like there is a cliche in every line, like "entombed", "vengeance burns inside", "blood filled tears", etc. Not fair that I don't really like the genre, but it seems like a good emo song.
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