|09-16-2008, 12:16 PM||#1 (permalink)|
Join Date: Sep 2008
Location: Dallas, TX
Shepard awaits question,
Answers with care,
To create this,
Eyes as bright as stars
In her heart
A hurting world
The Search for the Meaning of Life...
|09-16-2008, 04:19 PM||#2 (permalink)|
Join Date: Aug 2008
Location: Troy side'ah the dirt, NY
I liked it up until the cliche "eyes as bright as stars" simile. And I don't like the last line. Like the analogy/metaphor of a shepard.