Killertu's Songwriting Journal
 

well I'm here to get on a new hobbies as in singging and lyrics writing,I wrote many other parody but this one is my best so far,It a parody of take on me(I don't even know what to call as title for my parody yet)so check out and what u think:hphones:.

Dreaming all day
Seeing you a magical place
Love you everyday
Tonight I’m talking all about you
Pleasure all day
Using hand that all I needed

Take it off
Get on top
Just don’t stop
Orgasm

Just see you today
You hot and all but that who
Hard on at you
Never gonna get you but can’t do
Just say any
I know I like it when I’m playing you

Up and down
Side to side
Open wide
I’m coming

I love you all day
Remember you or I can’t say
Dream you O.K
You just a girl I can play with myself
Lying all day
You will get your love any day

Get it on
by myself
Light upon
Dream to you


The song basicaly about a guy dreamming with a girl but he can't get her so he have a me time if u know what I mean(TRUE STORY)

Its More Than A Feeling

GOt to love Boston hey hey

COm'on can someone atleast tell me something

Wifey Boozer would like this.

As for your question, I think it's a decent parody. The masturbation references on the last chorus are well played, but I'm not sure if they would fit in with the music.

Better than I could do though.

WHat would u mean by fit the music???

"Get it on
by myself
Light upon
Dream to you"

I can't picture Aha singing that.

Well it a parody....why would they sing that,Infact they wouldn't even see this :finger:

Does song needed to make sense???
 

Well I'm a song writer and I just wrote this beautiful new love song but...here the thing.....I don't think people with less intelligent(no offense:usehead:)know what it mean,even i don't really get it the first time I wrote this but check it out if you knowwhat i'm saying.


IT mostly the first sentence,but what u think???

PS:I just update a new part!,is till a draft BTW(I knwo I know...it chessy,the old part are color gray.)

It's Intelligence-not Intelligent....

Well english have alot of different meaning:stupid:

No I am pointing out that you used the wrong word which is quite ironic given the statement you wrote.

the love song is 17 seconds long, and it makes no sense.
sorry.

Also, I don't think intelligence will have anything to do with people not understanding your love song.
Just the fact that it does not make sense in the state that it is now.

Add an 's' every now and then and maybe don't refer to something as the 'who' and it will make you a million bucks.

It's good though.

Urmm if u asking....I did say this is a PART ....not the whole song,all I needed is asking for this part to see if is good, if that what u saying up there about 17 second

no it's not good. sorry. it is not correct

does title?

:laughing:

:laughing: oops. pissed myself

"does song needed to make sense?"

Is this a joke?

Does joke needed to make sense?

:laughing:

I dont get it

.....I don't even know what the song suppose to go,I just wrote randomly and wrote the song out later but that the final draft of that part.......IF u haven't check out my other creation,check this post if u haven't seen it (the site url).com/song-writing-lyrics-poetry/35813-take-me-parody.html

PS:I haven't got 15 post yet...till noobs to site

Well what am really meaning is the song is not support with correct past or present tense or other stuff like that,it just needed to sound good....I don't even know what am saying here but u get it???....any one can explain for me:usehead:???

are you saying she makes you a better person and because she makes you a better person youre worthy of her love? hard to describe but i think i feel what youre saying.

also, if the song makes sense to you then its fine. a lot of songs only make sense to the writers. anyone who disagrees with that is just ignorant.

EDIT: after readin some more posts it sounds like youre saying you dont even know hwat it means and you just put something together. if so, then thats stupid

if you're not concerned with the proper use of a language within a song then why use it? especially if, as you say, you don't even know what you're saying.

a song doesn't 'need' to make sense, but there's a difference between a song that is written to be vague and a song that doesn't make sense because it mangles a language. sorry, no offense intended, but...

kind of hurts to read... maybe try something like this instead

It's you, to whom I become true
It's you, that makes me new
It's you, and only you
Making me someone for you

it's not that great but it's not as broken.

I think you need to re-evaluate your usage of the english language.

OUCH that hurt:banghead:.......I really needed to rewrite my english but, love that remake you wrote.

But well I can't take that seen it wouldn't be my....ahhh....almost type in mind XD well I did but rewrote it XC

The western world obviously needs to get serious about education.

consider it a free edit, it's still your lyrical idea.

Coolio, but I'm gonna stick with my draft, it gonna hard to remember what not my

I lol'd many times in this thread.

I gave up after the first reply to my first comment. Its a fishing thread.

Fishing thread???what u mean???

Fishing it gonna hard to remember what not my

:laughing:

huh???I don't get it??I have very lack of memories to remembering things....

Why is your use of grammar so appalling?

Because I'm not from here....I'm till learning english,I from VN(Vietnam) got to USA about 4 year ago....

that makes so much more sense than anything you have said so far.

hes from your side of the globe, einstein.

Ah well that makes sense then
I thought it was the US's supposedly horrible state education system.