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Old 02-21-2009, 04:11 PM   #21 (permalink)
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wow. why don't you call it "Rhyming couplets In Menopause"?

It's overly emotional, and it's got no flow.
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Old 02-21-2009, 07:25 PM   #22 (permalink)
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I don't know who jamie is, but I think it's time to let go.
It's probably mostly your fault anyway, and I didn't even read the whole song.
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Old 01-10-2010, 08:35 PM   #23 (permalink)
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Well, i suppose you call yourself trend killer for a reason. but i have to agree that rap generally, GENERALLY, DOES suck.
lol. You quoted the wrong person. And, I get the name "Trendkiller" from a certain Pantera album. You do the math.
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Old 01-10-2010, 10:04 PM   #24 (permalink)
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Originally Posted by N00bie
Oright look, I have a lot of ****ing **** on my chest;
a lot of ****ed up ****.

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If i'm deciphering the "*****"'s correctly, then the first is fucking and the second is shit and if you combine these two words... this is what this rap is.
I'll stay if I ever could, and pick up your pieces babe, because there's never a perfect day.

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Old 01-19-2010, 11:33 AM   #25 (permalink)
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I think when reviewing this, you have to remember that most people who write aren't writing about themselves- they like to create characters. While songwriting is more often than not autobiographical, I highly doubt this is.
That said, I really dislike some of the language. Just not my style. It also seems to not have very much of a flow. But that's kinda hard to tell over the 'net.
try using some soap, cuz compared to me your an isotope
>_> not a good line. Not at all.

I think that the last bit is the best, but still. You'd better have one nice beat to put this too, or else it's just not going to be very good.
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Old 01-19-2010, 06:20 PM   #26 (permalink)
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I hope this is supposed to be rap. Because although we might not appreciate it, I know that rap fans would. Maybe you should split some stuff into different songs, just to shorten it up.
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