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Old 02-25-2009, 10:37 AM   #131 (permalink)
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I walk into a room
All the chicks love me.
I have no car
But I meet awesome people on the bus

Last week I got depressed
because I owed $49,000.00 for loans
Can't get blood from a stone
So I went and bought ice cream

I took a bike ride
and the wind was in my face
as I road the coast of southie
I pretended I was a pirate

The kids ask me if I have $5
"no"
Then Candy
"am I willy wonka?

I settle for showing them
what mentos do in diet coke
I tell them to collect cans
its a race with the homeless guys

My friends and I can't afford the bars
but when we pool money
Dominos is within reach
Only if we pick it up

The cables free
we steal it
Rosie plays guitar
and the neighbors sing along

my life is awesome
i hate quitters
I don't even own a steak knife
I don't have a closet.


So this is my super awesome poem I wrote in 5 minutes between shifts at work, I've been working pretty hard on it and I think I'm going to submit it to Watchtower.

Let me know what you think kthnxbi
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Old 02-25-2009, 11:01 AM   #132 (permalink)
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Old 02-25-2009, 11:07 AM   #133 (permalink)
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That is the single greatest poem I have ever read in my entire life. You, sir, are like the Carl Sandburg of Boston.
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Old 02-25-2009, 11:08 AM   #134 (permalink)
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I want your life man.
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Old 02-25-2009, 11:57 AM   #135 (permalink)
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Wow. Did you only read the first stanza? I'm more than just a pretty face you know.
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Old 02-25-2009, 12:20 PM   #136 (permalink)
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Wow. Did you only read the first stanza? I'm more than just a pretty face you know.
No. :C
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Old 02-25-2009, 01:23 PM   #137 (permalink)
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This makes me wonder if the time I spend writing is just a waste. I could never develope something as incredible as this.
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Old 02-25-2009, 01:30 PM   #138 (permalink)
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you're still wondering? Do I need to beat you over the head?
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Old 02-25-2009, 01:31 PM   #139 (permalink)
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Jesus Christ! My eyes, they burn.
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