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Old 03-08-2009, 05:22 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Girl you've got me thinking
but mostly got me drinking
and i haven't been this thirsty in a week

I named my whiskey Selby
and ill call you Aileen
i wish you both would let me rest in peace

[CHORUS]
Theres only one thing i can do
When you leave me so confused
Im drinking about thinking about you
[/CHORUS]

Well i waited for your call
and drank all my alcohol
so now im out of everything i need

I wish you'd stop this torture
i never met a woman colder
at least Selby puts a blanket over me.

[CHORUS]

I was waiting for your call
and drank all my alcohol
so now im out of everything i need

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Old 03-09-2009, 12:07 AM   #2 (permalink)
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Sad, you should move on.
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Old 03-13-2009, 07:43 PM   #3 (permalink)
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Sad, you should move on.
thanks, but i wasnt really lookin for relationship advice
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Old 03-14-2009, 11:11 AM   #4 (permalink)
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I'm going to make notes as I read.

The first two lines have already thrown me off.

It's very cliche...

I like the second stanza. Is this a song or a poem?

Overall, it's alright.

I wasn't particularly impressed.

And it would be nice to insert correct grammar and punctuation.
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