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Old 04-16-2009, 12:34 PM   #11 (permalink)
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moondust<-- says the one who cant even write songs, go and steal more songs:P

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Old 04-18-2009, 12:30 PM   #12 (permalink)
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rubbish and thats being generous
whoa, what ar you talking about this is a lot better than mainstream crap (Ex: Lady Gaga, any rap)
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Old 04-18-2009, 10:35 PM   #13 (permalink)
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suddenly
I hide behind this facade
stars in your eyes is blinding
my illusions

Northernlight
I call on you
attack me above
touch me from above
suffocate the night
Northernlight
Northernlight
Northernlight

In this night I fall in
A grief I cant recall
your hands
my pain

Northernlight
Sense my fear
attack m from above
touch me from nowhere
suffocate the fear
Northernlight
Northernlight
This night

Holding my breath
in this fire
heart losing beats
You say you say
you did

Northernlight
wipe my tears
with this power
touch me from above
Northernlight
Northernlight
tonight
Northernlight you sense
my fear
tonight

Come now to me
Northernlight
attack me free
this last
time
Not as good as your first, although maybe that's because I'm not a big fan of that much repetition and one or two word lines. Description is key, i feel like stanza's such as

Come now to me
Northernlight
attack me free
this last
time

are copouts, because.... well, they're very generic. Don't let me discourage you though, you have some real potential talent, I would just say read more lyrics by the greats, poems AND songs. I would suggest Jeff Mangum (from the band Neutral Milk Hotel), he's my favorite lyricist of all time.
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Old 04-18-2009, 11:21 PM   #14 (permalink)
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nice !!!
can you play some instrument music?
try to turn it into songs, or do you need some help?

i though it will be more nice if someone can sing it.
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Old 04-19-2009, 01:23 AM   #15 (permalink)
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thanks!

I canīt play any instruments, and need help there, Im trying to find someone to work with.. I have kind of ideas in my head what the songs should sound like, but it might not be easy to make a song if you canīt play instruments.. I guess?
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Old 04-19-2009, 01:26 AM   #16 (permalink)
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thanks!

I canīt play any instruments, and need help there, Im trying to find someone to work with.. I have kind of ideas in my head what the songs should sound like, but it might not be easy to make a song if you canīt play instruments.. I guess?
You should probably learn at least some simple guitar chords, unless you're planning to be a poet or to sell your lyrics to bands.
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Old 04-19-2009, 01:29 AM   #17 (permalink)
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I have been thinking of just selling my lyrics to bands, as i dont think I have enough patience with making own music.. But is there many bands looking for lyricswriters ?
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Old 04-19-2009, 01:31 AM   #18 (permalink)
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I have been thinking of just selling my lyrics to bands, as i dont think I have enough patience with making own music.. But is there many bands looking for lyricswriters ?
There are plenty of people who are skilled at their instrument but can't write lyrics for ****.
Just ask around, maybe you'll find some local band in need of lyrics.
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Old 04-19-2009, 02:47 PM   #19 (permalink)
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I like the second one alot.

very talented.
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Old 04-20-2009, 03:50 PM   #20 (permalink)
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wrote one quick here now... sorry to bomb u with songs, just feeling very creative and need help




Last night I woke up from my dream
that I never thought i would
I learned something from this night
That what you think might last
might suddenly fade away
without permission

Beauty turns to ashes
What once burned
die out
You still whisper in ace
Reaching for something to far away
Passion turns to ration
of our old love

Past is owned by empty hearts
longing to live a dream
we never got to fulfill
Past was somewhere to hide
when our dream
could never come apart

A wind melting ice in heaven
My heart canīt find its place
A wind carrying it away
To be caught again

Last night I fighted goodbye
that i never thought i would win
I learned some tears could end that night
Our night
that will stay forever
might might not fade away
In our hearts

Carrier of our dreams
Blowing over the fields
Reaching out to somewhere
Innocents will learn
Someday
what might comfort
our hearts
at rest
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